Very bad case of mouth bleed there.

I can’t say I followed every page in detail but fights have been entertaining so far.

(Sees city) either it’s now an urban graveyard or their sensors broke.

I have to admit I do like alien designs, it’s gelled to the dragonball style you see in manga well. Also the font is good.




Dbfunsexy doesn’t have a SFW link far as I’m aware, (despite searching), that said you can fall down a rabbit hole searching on stuff she draws. So that maybe why she’s not credited publicly.

Looking back videl shouldn’t had come along, this version did very little in contrast to everyone else.

Did the comic have an aim to try and have her rekindle some of her fighting days? Maybe but I think because of the large cast and juggling the plot that inevitably someone will get sidelined. She was sidelined even before this with her last appearance smiling beside pan with a meal ready.

I’m surprised Trunks and Goten hadn’t got sidelined (well trunks in the least, Goten did a few things since) 2 Resposta/e

No mention of who the author is? (I got an idea who it judging by comments from first page) but this is more or less uncredited.

I imagine n ext page he’ll be so weak that he dosent chance against a blank panel.

So I’m wondering when this is set, (cooler second film when everyone is off planet perhaps?)

Unless they can’t pick half saiyans.

I’ll have to say it’s a good use or using the same image with how it’s zoomed further out with narration to add some drama.

Ending page already?


This guy must have the worst luck in being sent to dojo's that don't care about sending you into the deep end. If i were him, I just get a 9-5 job and just play fighting games afterwards.

If only frieza could had seen this, it would be prime time comedy for him to watch vegeta snap and even trying to kill off another Saiyan.

I’m going to hate say this, but I fully agree. Last few pages have been very disjointed for action (not helped by confusion if the Gohan kid is actually there or not and this guy now having his own laser gun.

A commentator earlier mentioned the story lacks foreshadowing, or putting pieces into play. It wasn’t too long ago this guy snuck to put sugar in a car to ruin it. Why do that? The assumpation I had well he can’t be so strong and powerful if he resorted to doing that.

Now here we get him either dodging laser fire, tanking bullets and even pulling out his own better gun.

As much as I disliked some specials for rushed art and illogical choices, this is drawn well but suffers from very poor planning. And one of that is this fight has been contradictory which I didn’t think I would be saying Aries on in this chapter.

That's true, most (if not all) dojo's accept children to start learning.

The whole point of dojo is martial arts, to learn and train to be better.

Unless this guy has a really bad reputation then he should have a shot if children can.

I realised I made bit of a mixup, while this story does start on year 794, uub inital design had me thinking that 794 was also the year GT started because how identical his design is (aside from the outfit,) without realising GT was set in 789. So that was entirely my own error.

It’s a bit problematic at this point. Remember Uub was 15 before Buu sent him here (Asura beffed uub up but he was still 15) so two years passed in here and a 17 year old uub dating a 15 year old Anji would be awkward.

I don’t know if that was considered but if uub has a romantic interest it won’t be the girl back at his village. 2 Resposta/e

North kai is raising an eyebrow to this. 1 Resposta/e

Wasn't zamasu just U10's version of north kai at that point? It wasn't till recent Goaswu picked him to be a supreme kai candidate, so he wouldn't have reason to be there with lack of status and such.

This is the drawback with animations, not every format may support it (it’s true with generic images but it happens less often)

I know there’s animation and it shows on my PC but when I’m using my iPhone (which is a old model because I don’t buy a new one till I think the latest features are worth it) I get a play symbol that dosen’t play. I do give the artist credit for the comic not being too dependent on animation and can be read fine without it.

When the animation does work, it does pretty well. I think it’s one of the better animation shots in the comic. It’s colourful and detailed. The rain effect just makes it peaceful moment. 1 Resposta/e

I have to say the top image is great, even if it was a still image it stands out, and I think warrants how the story is currently recapping. (I’m not a fan of personally and hoping it go straight into characters interacting and learning about his family and his present situation etc. but some of these panels are very good)

cue credits

Hmm, Black has the power advantage so we'll see how good zamasu will get his plan in motion without being erm sliced.

I wager interplanetary salesmen.

And that is true, it is a nice cover. I'm not bashing on that but my point on using a background for uub's village that should have some accuracy or build up from the material established. Just not ripped stock image of africa. It's no more 'picky' then someone pointing out how many siblings Uub actually has. 1 Resposta/e

so I'm a bit mixed on this, colouring is nice but I don't agree with the design choice where Uub is born.

We know uub was raised in a remote setting with a village that didn't have a lot of wealth and poverty, however architecture looks more akin to Africa than based on parts of India like Khuri village if we want to go with Ubb brought up within a hot desert environment (because India has deserts) whose houses are styled differently. Thatched roofs in south asia are not typically the same style as traditional african architecture.

Though Uub's village had plenty of natural resources.






There are images of uub's home a few seconds sure (before the super manga) so I don't see why the change was needed. I am a bit picky on that considering other areas from south east asia could be used as a template.

We'll see how ten kids turn out as cast, it's a bit large so we'll see. 3 Resposta/e

I can't speak Portuguese, so translate best as you can:

Ironically this would be the most accurate phrase said by civil service (police, paramedics etc) "Hospice/ seen by an assistant/ secure hospital" are the right phrases said. Now these are corrupt law enforcers so doubt they care which word they use.

Asylum in itself isn't offensive, it's applied mainly nowadays to refugees seeking shelter. However it is very offensive to have it in context of mental health in the UK itself because of the stigma, from Victorian ages upto the very early 1990's. Asylum for mental health was depicted as sending 'crazies' to a dumping ground or a permanent detention. Not just those with mental health but people who were gay or women seen as 'problematic'. For that reason Asylum within mental health is very outdated. Despite it took till about year 2000 to phase the word out entirely.

Nowadays anyone sectioned or referred to treatment are sent to name of a hospital which by description be described as a 'secure hospital' or 'short-term institute' and 'mental health unit'

I still work weekends at a mental health unit so I am familiar with why the wording of asylum was phased out.

'Arkham Asylum' is (apart from trademark name) is set in a fictional setting within comics and animation. It is deeply engraved into DC and for that reason won't change despite it being outdated. For example in "The batman" they refer Arkham having a hospital, not for the insane etc.

In the UK saying to someone they should go to an asylum is quite offensive and insulting.

How in gods name is he not vapourized?

Looking back this could had been just added for the previous chapter. Together that make it 34 pages and all content is fine because there isn't a lot here, there is 16 pages in this. Five amount to the 'reveal' that Gast is holding back. (I never liked this concept, even in Z. You can throw cool moves etc but if it amounts to 'but im not being serious' then you may as well take time to make a coffee and sit down when there are actual stakes) Call me all you like but I just switch off when this happens.

Cell's plan isn't bad, it's pretty much standard, use clones while powering up the bigger attack but there's no more content to it. For example why not have Gast attempt to stop the attack like he did with Cold but it's so strong that it overpowers him. (And have Cell retort back if Gast was still gauging his strength) I would like to see a sense of struggle/desperation when you consider how much control he was in the fight, even with just one arm.

If there is a future chapter of this I much prefer more content be added beyond just part of a fight given this and previous chapter has tried to do some world building. I know this chapter is structured just for this but it could have added more.

It is the 41st millennium, and Goku Black is still taking his time to kill Trunks.

'I distracted you long enough so that my farthest away clone will launch an attack'

'Giving me time to dodge?'

'Don't try to techno-babble me with your common sense!'

That's a valid point, I went back on the pages and there's no hint of him in town or walking off with sugar. If both cops were out of their vehicle in town and a heavily clothed indivual was walking in background with a bag from a sugar store example, I think that be a better case of foreshadowing that lead upto this.

It seems like a missed opportunity in this case. 2 Resposta/e

Either newgrounds, reddit or deviantart as I posted the original a few days ago:


https://w...orse-1229312511





Yup.

So the original script was just kakarott standing in empty pond with the memeory, I suggested if there was a skeleton and kakarott is in fact holding a skull of his once best friend. To show that he did have some regret, also that he is suffering from insanity on the basis he returned to the spot to hold the skull of a friendd he had long since killed.

The other suggestion was to include Raditz arrival to show when this took place.

There better be a battle mech that he pilots as well!

Probably still coping, till Babadi finds him by chance.

Which I think is inconsistent when we had Black in the series humiliate Vegeta on first encounter as well as giving him a near fatal blow in that same fight.

Here it's decided that Black will toy his opponent further because Trunks would be dead otherwise so they had to write themselves out of this somehow and that just makes this situation ridiculous, double bladed but does tears on clothing and not even one deep cut? 1 Resposta/e

A gang immediately preying on a rival one is a smart move, supports the narration about there being bandits and criminals in the rise. It adds something to this new setting which I like.

I can't say the 'element of surprise' is valid in this circumstance.

Now the element of surprise has been done in dbz of course; mainly krillin's destructo disc. It nearly killed Nappa, cut frieza's tail etc. Now those characters didn't have a lower sense of kai during that moment, it's just the destructo disc is a really good technique. Just as solar flare can cause brief blindness to frieza despite him have PL of millions and the flare producing zero in form of destructive capacity.

Even Tri-Beam kept Cell in bay.

So element of surprise do work when appropiate technique is applied (ie: Goku Instant transmission + Kamehameha)

This though is a surprise attack of brute strength. We have to assume that for this to happen, the androids have to had their PL drop prior to being attacked and that the controlled android is significantly stronger.

To compare krillin knocked the android aside that was draining gast (and he wasn't torn in half) and if were going to look at the dbz series, vegeta knocks the android aside that was absorbing goku. At no point were either sliced in half.

The only point where someone slices characters in half without effort was ssj2 gohan against cell jr's. And that was to show the immense power gap.

I get it Bunga wants to show off a panel but this isn't something that can be handwaved as 'element of surprise' or super science, it's just a moment to show quick action to get the story moving forward. How this was achieved I argue is more of a afterthought.

Gero: Ah, so this is their hideout. Oh, you were piloting my android through this? Hmm, Mind if I use it on your friend?

If that doesn't occur on the next page than i'm demanding a refund!

This isn't bad, I don't like how last two frames have their border run over the edge. I assume there is a reason for it.

Apart from what looks like recycled use of faces, it's good.

edit: Meant good and 'not good' don't know why that happened. 1 Resposta/e

Just have him state a number more than 20 which will have Trunks freak out thinking how he got past that limit.

He certainly can't get stronger to the point where he's comparable to vegetto. But that may be the implication if trunks has to fuse with an alternative zamasu according to the thumbnail of the story.

This does have a issue, if she is decapitating the androids with literally a single blow, then how is this a struggle for the heroes? Two androids (and one from previous chapter) killed with a single strike. That's a pretty signficant advantage. While some aren't equal in power, it's a bit weird that there's no more then say Cell who can be of this capability of dominance. 1 Resposta/e

To be honest I never heard of Kerry before till now.

This is fine but time hasn’t been kind to the frieza joke. But mix of style is neat.

I’ll have to admit that seems a little…chaotic. I’m guessing it’s organised like a series of circles, the most outer being fleeting contributors, then with each inner circle is a smaller group of more committed to a project. 200 over the years is still impressive, I thought you meant 200 active contributors which would had been insane with that being higher then the combined comment section of all languages for a main story page.

200 actively contributing or an overall contribution from the years amounting to 200?

I don’t recall seeing a list of who is part of the association, aside from translators, artists and mods (some having dual roles) that dosen’t equate to that large number. 1 Resposta/e

The suspense was a key aim that I liked, I think the author wanted to add bit of toriyama (the dragon) in the mix I’m not saying it’s a bad thing just unexpected with pages previously showing a somewhat grounded setting, then there’s a dragon flying by during the standoff. It does add a reminder that this world still has its ‘fantasy’ from the original dragon ball days. 1 Resposta/e

Truth be told I’m more distracted by the out of the nowhere dragon passing by.

This looks like a solid start but I’m guessing this will equate to a ‘is that all’ from black. 2 Resposta/e

You ok over there? I’m sorry to hear the uphill your facing. I can sympathise with the challenges you face. All I can say is just take one matter one step at a time. I would also say you need to speak someone a bit closer to your personal circle. Maybe they can help give you practical support. I understand the need to have a outlet but try to see your not alone in facing your challenges. 1 Resposta/e

He means if the whole comic is simply being retold without any new features, which it looks like to be the case. (I hadn’t seen it on YT or anywhere else but if it’s all deja vu at this point then chances are nothing new won’t be added) 1 Resposta/e

I didn’t know he two different bands till now, I checked upto the majin revolt and he still has one band and one bandage.

I believe slowly killing humanity was to twist the knife more in Trunks (for time travelling) that said (and only just occurred to me) how is bulma still alive at this point? There’s no reason he wouldn’t go straight to her like he did in the other timeline. 1 Resposta/e

I’m expecting a wizard of oz refrence next page, instead of a house on a witch, it’s a pod on a Yamcha.

Frieza survived destruction of namek, he even survived nuking earth in RoF.

He has two unique traits in the series, being very resilient (even for his species as Cold just died to a single shot by Trunks) and being able to survive in space.

Being a tad controversial but we know saiyan’s can’t withstand extreme heat (or core of the earth shown in super) have to hold their breath underwater and can’t survive in space. It’s not unreasonable a nuke head on would do the job of killing a saiyan because in the first few moments of detonation the temperature is several times hotter then the sun from 1 megaton. So nukes can do the job if you want to apply hard science (though this was brief research via google search. I’m not a scientist!)

But if this was a megaton nuke then everyone on the ground is very much dead.

However this battle isn’t taking itself seriously so we just roll with assumpation that it’s a very clean and self contained bomb. 1 Resposta/e

NO MOEE RECAPS!!!

(Ahem)

It’s a nice page and it’s good that Trinks power increase is addressed straight away given its apprent this won’t be straight forward and black must have something to his advantage.

With regards to the Mufaba, Trunks knows the technique but not how to make the seal that makes the container keep the foe imprisoned. Without knowledge of that Mufaba is worthless.

Obviously he just need to find rhoshi but we don’t know if he’s alive in this point in the timeline. It’s possible black killed rhoshi prior to start of the arc. We know he’s been on earth for some time before the show’s introduction.

That there were several people that looked at this and no one from Malpha etc looked at this and said ‘This page needs further work.’ Everyone involved was more interested in pumping out a product then revising content. Yes it was under Sayazur all the same but there wasn’t any pushback or serious discussion how the story would be done. And as mentioned Salagir gave this the ok but could also had said to basically revise some details before applying the story to be published. 1 Resposta/e

Bah to you both! I think previous chapter was fine but my view is the recap was longer than it should be and should be balanced out by more of the setting it’s in.

We’re at the here and now so that’s the main thing.

(Even I’d trunks wielded double blades he be never as cool as skeletor from 2002 he-man, he double wielded like a boss!

I’ll just be a broken record if I bring up points must comment se toon have done. So I’ll break it to a few points:

Even though it’s a concept no one asked for, it did have some promise but was ruined not just by poor use of characters with some existing just so they can have a one liner at a rival but some of the pages were frankly, terrible. Unfinished, poor scaling and using refrences do apprent the fact they show first thing on google images gives an idea how rushed this was.

Blame can’t be on sayazur for ruining his own work, it should had been rejected by salagir till there was some quality to it. Even if some if the artists could not do any better, the pages that had just flat colouring and no shading even was bad.

There are about four websites and three discord servers that have Dbm as a topic, all of them can’t agree on if the main story of Dbm is good but all do agree that this was a very poor story that has bruised the credibility of its main artist and leads but it also could had been prevented if they tried to revise the work and story and not rush it for what is a non-canon explanation to Dbm broly. 2 Resposta/e

Wait that was the first chapter? Bit of a let down given it was 90% recap but we’ll see how this goes moving forward. 3 Resposta/e

Looking back at the comments (and my own view on it) it seemed very likely the reveal would be Gohan being a cyborg because dealing his fate in such a trivial manner almost entirely off-screen if you will never added weight and barely and Gast never shown a reaction. So it looks like that be the case and well…. I be surprised if that isn’t the case.

That line to shadow about why he was named that was so cringey, not the cringiest a sonic game has done but they really stretched the plausibility of that claim. We get it girl you can wanted to say shadow because you don’t like to say black, it’s ok Maria we get it, your a closet racist.

Get off the computer and get back to exploring the mansion, Barry.

Dammit another flashback page (not really I know)

Interesting so far, I wouldn’t mind if the author popped on here to give some commentary , surprised he been quiet about this.

I wouldn’t had mind seeing an actual plan in effect, priority has been shifted too much on Easter egg cameos (previous page) and this run away debacle. I think I’ll borrow the taser from civvie11 enforcing no python references.

Now smoke screen I admit could be useful (with DBS infamous zamasu and Goku black losing Goku because of it) so
We’ll see how it plays given the cyborgs ability to pick energy from engines as well as standard energy. So it shouldn’t work but could also work.

Still the real deal of this chapter is seeing how gast’s fight will be drawn out if a certain bug man shows up and keen to see how that plays out.

Not everyone follows comment section page per page or even recap the previous pages. This is one of those occasions where most people know it would be on a predictable flashback trend.

I doubt people are outright ignoring you often a case either they didn’t see your comment or sent have anything worth replying about.

OR DOES IT?

Ok, I think it now comes to an end. 1 Resposta/e

I expect an Amazon prime release with J. K. Simmons voicing Son Bra. I don’t if that’s odd. Get that contract done!

Phipsil monologue vs Phicard monologue. Their lecture will be legendary but offscreen.

‘Shock the youngest viewers’

This just reinforces my theory that this season of CSB has been hit by further cuts in its production costs. It seems DBM studio is unwilling to further fund a new season let alone exciting fights.

How long before we get 14 page recaps of events we already know for sake of padding out the story? (Looking at you ‘the inexorable distortion!’)

Fan petition for season 3!

I didn’t have a issue with the concept itself (a villain winning) compared to so many arcs where the big bad was stopped and everything was wished back. The idea that something could irreversible I think has merit. But the arc had some very flawed issues.

— Goku constantly being an idiot, not knowing what a kids is, forgetting a item and then forgetting the seal that could stop zamasu. His dumb moments were just annnoying and not even funny.

— They never addressed how Trunks could have a chance against immortal zamasu, so if he had won it would be a lingering cop out on the basis he ‘just did’ if there were hints throughout if Trunks did this and that leading to it, I think it would have merit or basis if a false hope.

— Zamasu engulfing multiverse was so out of nowhere. He can intertwine with reality, some clue to that being intention or it was feasible I think was needed. It didn’t help they address the crazy power level jumps.

Zamasu winning is fine by itself (not everyone wins) but it was just all over the place.

There’s a sense of dejavu with narrative backstory on events known to us like with tales of bardock on here in that pacing is longer then it should be. What it should be is chibi dam z should try to see this from a new reader. We know it’s aimed at those that know Trunks’ story, will those that follow him read up on his past or flick past the page (I believe this was printed at one point)

This story is several years old so no idea what changed since but for his own benefit it would had been better to try and condense the known past, combine it in a creative sense and then just push onto the new uncharted story.

The hakai part where the author wants to make a franchise is quite true, I spoke to him via mondo cool if (in return for backing him) the author would put hakai on Dbm as a exclusive.

Now I was prepared to pay quite a bit so he didn’t need to use patreon where it can be uploaded into here (and this was when hakai stalled) outlining have the main chapters done.

However he said he still wanted to do a franchise and outlined several side special projects (and realised it was never going to see a end goal)


I looked at his work prior and as it was felt he only neeeded 15 more chapters (and was prepared to pay for them) but he had ideas for a lot including a second tournament of power.

New age never replied back and bloodlines did answer and refer to salagir but I think they refused.

Kakumei I don’t mind some of their darker stuff because Dbm has gone those paces also but some of the characters aren’t good, prioritising selling volumes meant the story has dragged far longer than it should. (They we’re steadfast in releasing a chapter of vegeta vs a destroyer candidate where part of it was bad, rushed artwork with several pages look like sketches done on first go but did it because they were behind and wanted to sell)

I also think a number of designs don’t gel well, take their design of the rouge angels. But the point above is my biggest issue with kakumei.

I have to admit I don’t have a good opinion of dragon ball super fan mangas and that’s mainly due to not enough of them where the vast majority isn’t great.

The one I’m thinking of was done by an Italian artist and somehow zamasu came back, by going into Gohan rearmed (pun intended) and the fight scene it had was more a long dragged take of hopelessness. Trunks died Gohan black wins, wants to go across the multiverse but to do that please sign my patreon and be impressed by 20 second animated of Gohan black where there’d a flash in background and a small smirk.

I swear to god there were two takes of this Gohan black.

Then there a dbs fan manga where frieza killed zeno by a ‘god blade’ and to rub salt on wound I think that was the only super comic considered completed.


I’ll admit I thought hakai was going somewhere but lost interest when the author wanted to make a franchise out of it,

And kakumei just dosent have good writing.

I’m not going to be judgemental but the history of super fan comics hadn’t been well, super. But the start is fine so far.

As for why trunks fused with zamasu I’m going to guess that the zamasu trunks meets is a good version. 2 Resposta/e

Ok, though cautious if is going to flip and be ‘it’s Gohan black’ because everyone loved that insufferable concept.

It’s nicely drawn, exposition feels a bit out of place as Mai would had known this befriend Trunks before Black came. And if it’s for the reader, the knowledge is as common as superman comes from krypton (gave away spoilers, sorry!)

Recaps are good for authors to find their own pacing so there is that. 2 Resposta/e

I like it so, Although 10 years for a time skip is quite long and I can’t imagine frieza caring about the saiyans and even vegeta fat that point in time (or vegeta tolerating his time as lapdog any longer)

By time raditz went to earth werent vegeta and Nappa already doing their own thing as I’m sure the series mentioned vegeta went awol from frieza’s command and that frieza didn’t deal with him right away was because he was at namek as vegeta was healing. 1 Resposta/e

It’s a old 4th wall joke…but the execution of this made me chuckle, almost harkens back to early days of Dbm when arcs were more lighter in tone and such.

XXI should have save some time and summon himself the farmer’s shotgun.

Jesus! And I thought the infamous ‘frieza defeated’ episode title lacked subtlety!

Well, let’s see what happens. 1 Resposta/e

So I am a little surprised this where the chapter apparently concludes, it does need more pages to at least expand on this thorn and bulma rivalry (personally I would have bulma killed off and have thorn try and fill boots given he has engineering skills)

I will correct this assumpation that just because you are from a more advanced society means you can understand everything more ‘primitive’ or culturally different. You can be the smartest person in the room to know how a wheel is made but if you don’t have the practical skills to fashion then you are not neccsary the most useful. Being hyper capable isn’t a thing, projects take teamwork and local experience. The way Thorn has waltz in and now solving things reminds me of a Steven segal movie.

This bluntness may come about because the story is short but I rather have bulma not on then sidelined, in the main timeline she figured out how to remove 16’s bomb (and discussed this with her dad on best way) and in future trunks timeline she made time machine.

That and capsule corp is the only tech out of all the races in db universe that has minitrised tech via their capsule corp tech but even they don’t know how FTL works.

Thorn at least should need time to understand the tech on earth.

I think most part the chapter is fine but it’s one of those specials that does need more pages for the reasons mentioned. 2 Resposta/e

So out of pages so far, I’ll make a mention on this. I like it, clever way of combing fates of Goku and piccolo without showing their bodies.

It had a vibe of what happens next with intrigue. Well done. 1 Resposta/e

I have to disagree with both points, more the second.

The problem to the first argument is that it centres on bulma being publicly called out, that isn’t something just to brush aside and put it up later for another day. It can be dealt with by Thorn showing some intuition in picking up on a comment that characters or even the reader. Brushing it offhand isn’t the right way, not when Thorn has challenged the ‘chain of command’ (That being bulma’s authority and perceptive that is seen as factual, to challenge that is to undermine the confidence in anyone else) now there may be a payoff to this so in time we’ll see if this storytelling option pays (although this seems to be an admission that thorn will survive this otherwise how will not know what it was he noticed?)

The second point I have issue with, just because it’s in dragonball dosent mean it can be repeated on here, groping and showing panties is in dragonball but it’s not here.

I’m not agai st an exaggerated payoff, it has worked for vegeta due to his reaction about learning Goku uding bulma as a means to bribe old kai. Something so outrageous it’ll make any reserved character like vegeta snap.

Here it’s abruptly random and future timeline bulma was generally serious, she was more relaxed prior to trunks meeting cell (thinking all threats are gone) it’s not only out of character but loses focus on the story. Bulma wants to find a way to beat the androids has concern to welfare of others but proclaims to be a genius for no reason to have comedy with ego.

It hasn’t helped that two pages ago the page with the email had a message that felt more in place as a mini comic parody.

While I understand the attempt to create humor this is hit and miss being abrupt and dosent enhance any joke or punchline. (We also had lighter tone content in last two pages) To me personally I don’t this was done well or should had been done.

It’s fine but the comical exaggeration of bulma’s face I’m not keen on, I just think it’s uneeded (though why do I keep thinking critters was used as a movie reference for her mouth!?) Page works fine without forced exaggeration.

It’s not bad but we’ll see if there’s any payoff with this ‘lie’ including how he picked it up.

With the eyes, it was a personal choice in order to make a more stronger connection between it and the book XXI is holding (xii refrence to movie 12 where janemba hails from) the eye colouring was to imply XXI did indeed summoned ‘a warrior of evil’

I did actually have the script for XXI vs gast a while back as I asked salagir if I can draw the chapter blind and compare to how asura did it, problem with that is the script was finally given about two months before the chapter was published! So I knew details on cover from script and this was something I had in mind though adapted since seeing asura’s cover for sake of comparison.

Kinda a mixture of a few ideas.

So I personally believe a cover should foreshadow events or hint on content within the chapter and the series as a whole. when I was way way younger I had crystal maze ‘pick your own adventure’ books. Covers generally had clues or extra detail for anyone bring extra observant.

Also as strange as it sounds I think there has been too many movie references or to America media, might not be within previous Dbm covers but I feel like Star Wars refrences have been too often where it lost some of if it’s appeal.

There wasn’t much refrence with French Media so with Dbm being mainly French I figured go with that.

I have to agree on shabby with this, it’s a true a bad story is easy pickings for over top comments and those go beyond criticism but a bad story can be avoidable. This has been inconsistent and not helped by Sayazur’s deflecting criticism or making things up (like saying he was hit by dozens of pings on discord for questions which never happened)

The only bit that was out of order was a member of the Latin America group changing Sayazur’s page.

But this should have been pushed back till it was more consistent, I know spacebattles actually did this (a much larger forum with art section that had some dragon ball fans posting their own art) one guy did a art story which was more or less a series of random panels much like Sayazur’s, only mods stepped in locked the thread and didn’t open it till that artist improved his comic (which he did)

The comic won’t be locked of course but it needed feedback before deciding to see it published.

For high res (and source) link below:

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If being nit picky it’s amazing they hadn’t been found sooner, all these computers, lighting need a generator to support it. I’m assuming their base is on the ground because of how high ceiling is, unless they dug a deep hole and excavated.

It’s possible this existed before the crisis as a backup but we don’t know how they solved the issue of not being picked by the cameo cyborgs.

What isn’t acceptable is bulma smoking in such a electrical exposed setting and two kids running around, being a distraction or possibly ruining research by tripping on wires.

When cities have no power this stands out as a lighthouse of energy output. It’s a fine page but it does have some questions lurking under it. 1 Resposta/e

This is missing a special, Gast’s connections is fleeting at best, if we want a bond established there should be content inbetween this. Is he friend by previous unknown adventure or did he feel he had a closer bond because he was the one (I think) that read his mind and him concerned is more out of that?

Either way I think something was needed if he’s just being the new piccolo at this point.

I’m going to guess there’s an army of cyborgs on earth right and maybe Gohan is the new android 17. 1 Resposta/e

True but even piccolo needed but if a breather, gast was like ‘oh. That’

I do like the angles the action was done, kinda wish a destructo disc was thrown instead of a leaping in kick.

Bit surprised the cyborg didn’t pick up krillin’s energy with the ‘pick up energies hence why I’m walking’ but that could be chalked to not being focused. 1 Resposta/e

Luigi as the next antagonist confirmed!

Find out who it is next…after these sponsorship messages.

Did he see their devices on their hand? They were draining energy but I don’t think he could had seen their hands, (gast didn’t either)

Thankfully the ship that has a charger that plug into android as well as iPhone. Thorn is surviving ok so far. 1 Resposta/e

One thing I noted is gast height changes often, if he was tall like 17ft he was, the woman shouldn’t had been able to get her arms around him, I don’t fault the artist for this but it’s why I’m not a fan of gast apparently being so tall because you can’t really fit him in.

That and the energy drain is a bit too quick, gero’s took time with piccolo (and had him in a better lock) here gast looks ready to smash his arm to her and faints. Perhaps Gast is French for fraud. 2 Resposta/e

I was in a bad mood earlier due too offline related matter and that mood carried over on when making the post. My original comment wasn’t my best post and should had posted when I was more calm.

See how this turns out. 2 Resposta/e

I was going to say piccolo’s power at his peak in Z was comparable to android 17 but I don’t think fusion of the two piccolos would be comparable to fusion of two android 17’s (no one can beat piccolo when he’s super piccolo!)

I guess if trying to get a somewhat accurate gauge we can look at how much power piccolo got after fusing with nail. He went from namek saga vegeta level to fighting second form frieza.

So my guess is a fusion with two piccolos (who fused with kami) I say is multiplier of three to their current power level. 1 Resposta/e

I do get this point, after all android 19 has no origin and who knows if more was intended. So there are more character lore that can be expanded on official ones.

That said oc’s can spice up the game (look at XXI)

It depends how they are utilised, now if they bring worldbuilding and being a obstacle for characters to overcome that’s fine but fodder for sake of making someone more badass without the challenge I think is a hinderance.

We’ll just see.

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Bom desenho, mas ainda não consigo acreditar que você fez isso. 1 Resposta/e

Normally this would be the point where the fight ends, but I doubt these androids were updated with a thinking capacity.

One of the things Salagir asks for is his script to be respected, that said that there can be one or two lines where something may seem a bit confusing which are worth highlighting.






You can walk down the street and tell if someone short is a teenager or a small adult or vice versa, recognising the distinct physical changes. A 5’7 adult is an adult, someone who is 6’7 isn’t even more of an adult. Piccolo grew his size in original dragon ball and demon king piccolo first showed up as a old namekian. Even kami (without disguise) was apprent in the tournament where piccolo grew 50ft.

There’s plenty of detail Gero had from his spying to know namekians (or a ‘piccolo’) don’t keep getting bigger as they older. If anything they should be pointing out he’s considerably large for a ‘piccolo’ compared to king piccolo, piccolo and kami.

@Ironleaf

Neva is a namekian from the demon realm, upon arriving to earth he manage to summon the dragon balls to him (even though they were stone) and made them active.

So Gast comment about it being impossible is only true for himself. The bigger problem is Gast would know who Neva was, him regarded as a legend in namekian lore.

In short: DB Daima isn’t compatible. 1 Resposta/e

I swear everyone wants holographic panels, a bid to join the MCU?

I don’t think frieza would know where earth is or placed it on his list straight away, didn’t he only learn of it after vegeta’s defeat and went straight to namek?

I’m guessing gast must have visited earth before because he only met bulma and co once, but premature to consider them friends when they haven’t done anything for him so far. 1 Resposta/e

I personally wish the cover had its own idea than imitate a earlier dragonball cover, maybe I’m just getting tired of ‘Easter eggs’ and other pop culture refrences for sake of cool than continuity. if this was before dragon ball returned with battle of gods etc where a nod reference to similir covers I would had appreciated it but U don’t think it’s striking as a idea, where too similir takes like this have come and gone.

We’ll see how the pages fare in the coming weeks. 1 Resposta/e

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And this is why DBM need random drug testing on its artists

The individual there is a misguided Zelda fan, everyone knows that Metroid is peak Nintendo.

So…who’s going to feed chibi bra her own heart? 1 Resposta/e

Agree also, ki blades are overrated, cold steel all the way!