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12/04/21
Hello to all, so far I'm getting to grips with the site, I'm just a guy that contributes and works a lot.
Hello to all, so far I'm getting to grips with the site, I'm just a guy that contributes and works a lot.
thebritwriter is part of the DBMultiverse team.
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thebritwriter
April 26th
Truth be told I’m more distracted by the out of the nowhere dragon passing by.
This looks like a solid start but I’m guessing this will equate to a ‘is that all’ from black. 2 Replie(s)
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This looks like a solid start but I’m guessing this will equate to a ‘is that all’ from black. 2 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
March 26th
Superman55aa was saying:
I am so tired of dealing with real world problems and 1st world problems and emotional problems. That I am drain and tired. Everything makes me tired. This seizure medication(prozetc(10 mg) each day. Advocating for myself for social security disaability benefits. Constantly being discipline to fight for my attention for a case worker to take me serious enough in the dekalb of whatever huaman relations to get Food Stamps each month, renewing it, applying, making sure there is enough food to eat and meal prep.
Dealing with my Dad/gerald wayne brown 60 year old ass problems, now dealing with his nacisstants bullshit that I forgot about.
Expressing myself through this comment section when I don't have anywhere else to express myself online or in the real world because I am sick and tired of being sick and tired.
I want to get cremation already for my cause of death and get this shit over with just like my mother naomi marshall gant, and uncles that came before me with there deaths with how I had to used Power of Attorney to deal with there funeral arrangements with there untimely deaths god forbid.
I know the internet can leave some things out of context and I am a total stranger here when annymous ; but I don't know what else to do. I am exhausted, depleted, and empty being there for my dad, caretaking for my parents, worrying about my nieces, nephews, cousins that are well some are full grown with families and REAL careers of there own and my own petty regrets and hatred for myself.
Dealing with my Dad/gerald wayne brown 60 year old ass problems, now dealing with his nacisstants bullshit that I forgot about.
Expressing myself through this comment section when I don't have anywhere else to express myself online or in the real world because I am sick and tired of being sick and tired.
I want to get cremation already for my cause of death and get this shit over with just like my mother naomi marshall gant, and uncles that came before me with there deaths with how I had to used Power of Attorney to deal with there funeral arrangements with there untimely deaths god forbid.
I know the internet can leave some things out of context and I am a total stranger here when annymous ; but I don't know what else to do. I am exhausted, depleted, and empty being there for my dad, caretaking for my parents, worrying about my nieces, nephews, cousins that are well some are full grown with families and REAL careers of there own and my own petty regrets and hatred for myself.
You ok over there? I’m sorry to hear the uphill your facing. I can sympathise with the challenges you face. All I can say is just take one matter one step at a time. I would also say you need to speak someone a bit closer to your personal circle. Maybe they can help give you practical support. I understand the need to have a outlet but try to see your not alone in facing your challenges. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
March 22nd
Koshej was saying:
beeruz was saying: Is this a re telling? I've seen this whole story in full on YouTube I think but now it's on dbm
Huh? This is actually past the canon Super timeline, lol. Or do you mean the actual comic being YT'ed?
Huh? This is actually past the canon Super timeline, lol. Or do you mean the actual comic being YT'ed?
He means if the whole comic is simply being retold without any new features, which it looks like to be the case. (I hadn’t seen it on YT or anywhere else but if it’s all deja vu at this point then chances are nothing new won’t be added) 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
March 22nd
Damian Qualshy was saying:
Dislpay name was saying: It's weird that they tried to keep demon king Piccolo as a mystery fighter, what was the thought proccess behind it?
Also this might sound like a weird critique but you guys gave too much polish to Bardock's armor, it makes the scratch marks look unnatural.
I'll agree with the broken parts, they don't look like the armor is broken but instead like they're the part of the armor's design.
Although I only JUST NOW noticed how messy his outfit is. Especially the arm bands. I didn't know he had two different ones lmao.
As for Piccolo, I think that it wasn't simply just his existence, but also the fact that he's the Nameless Namekian again. As Junior pointed out during his first fight.
Also this might sound like a weird critique but you guys gave too much polish to Bardock's armor, it makes the scratch marks look unnatural.
I'll agree with the broken parts, they don't look like the armor is broken but instead like they're the part of the armor's design.
Although I only JUST NOW noticed how messy his outfit is. Especially the arm bands. I didn't know he had two different ones lmao.
As for Piccolo, I think that it wasn't simply just his existence, but also the fact that he's the Nameless Namekian again. As Junior pointed out during his first fight.
I didn’t know he two different bands till now, I checked upto the majin revolt and he still has one band and one bandage.
thebritwriter
March 19th
Teleported_Bread was saying:
Damian Qualshy was saying: I'm honestly surprised Black and Zamasu didn't go on with their plan after Trunks and Mai died. It's not like they died like.. 2 hours before the main duo's arrival.
Of course they did. But they decided to destroy the Human race more slowly than with other mortals, whose planets they seemingly implied to have simply destroyed.
Of course they did. But they decided to destroy the Human race more slowly than with other mortals, whose planets they seemingly implied to have simply destroyed.
I believe slowly killing humanity was to twist the knife more in Trunks (for time travelling) that said (and only just occurred to me) how is bulma still alive at this point? There’s no reason he wouldn’t go straight to her like he did in the other timeline. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
March 18th
I’m expecting a wizard of oz refrence next page, instead of a house on a witch, it’s a pod on a Yamcha.
Saigo no Son page 36
thebritwriter
March 16th
Dislpay name was saying:
Decends was saying: zero logic was saying: Yall think Frieza saga Frieza would die to a nuclear bomb???
I suppose it would depend how many kilotons or megatons and if it was Fission (splitting atom) or Fusion (combining atoms). I feel like a significant enough fusion one might hurt or kill Frieza since its basically harnessing the heat and energy of a Star for a moment and I don't think Frieza has show anything to suggest he can withstand those temperatures
You do bring up a good point, the fact that the explosion is point-blank makes it a lot more dangerous potentially than a simple ki explosion which seemingly gives an equal spread of damage. Even then though, i'd be surprised if this explosion killed or even significantly weakened the cyborg.
I suppose it would depend how many kilotons or megatons and if it was Fission (splitting atom) or Fusion (combining atoms). I feel like a significant enough fusion one might hurt or kill Frieza since its basically harnessing the heat and energy of a Star for a moment and I don't think Frieza has show anything to suggest he can withstand those temperatures
You do bring up a good point, the fact that the explosion is point-blank makes it a lot more dangerous potentially than a simple ki explosion which seemingly gives an equal spread of damage. Even then though, i'd be surprised if this explosion killed or even significantly weakened the cyborg.
Frieza survived destruction of namek, he even survived nuking earth in RoF.
He has two unique traits in the series, being very resilient (even for his species as Cold just died to a single shot by Trunks) and being able to survive in space.
Being a tad controversial but we know saiyan’s can’t withstand extreme heat (or core of the earth shown in super) have to hold their breath underwater and can’t survive in space. It’s not unreasonable a nuke head on would do the job of killing a saiyan because in the first few moments of detonation the temperature is several times hotter then the sun from 1 megaton. So nukes can do the job if you want to apply hard science (though this was brief research via google search. I’m not a scientist!)
But if this was a megaton nuke then everyone on the ground is very much dead.
However this battle isn’t taking itself seriously so we just roll with assumpation that it’s a very clean and self contained bomb. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
March 15th
NO MOEE RECAPS!!!
(Ahem)
It’s a nice page and it’s good that Trinks power increase is addressed straight away given its apprent this won’t be straight forward and black must have something to his advantage.
With regards to the Mufaba, Trunks knows the technique but not how to make the seal that makes the container keep the foe imprisoned. Without knowledge of that Mufaba is worthless.
Obviously he just need to find rhoshi but we don’t know if he’s alive in this point in the timeline. It’s possible black killed rhoshi prior to start of the arc. We know he’s been on earth for some time before the show’s introduction.
The inexorable distortion page 19
(Ahem)
It’s a nice page and it’s good that Trinks power increase is addressed straight away given its apprent this won’t be straight forward and black must have something to his advantage.
With regards to the Mufaba, Trunks knows the technique but not how to make the seal that makes the container keep the foe imprisoned. Without knowledge of that Mufaba is worthless.
Obviously he just need to find rhoshi but we don’t know if he’s alive in this point in the timeline. It’s possible black killed rhoshi prior to start of the arc. We know he’s been on earth for some time before the show’s introduction.
thebritwriter
March 14th
PrimeFighter was saying:
thebritwriter was saying: I’ll just be a broken record if I bring up points must comment se toon have done. So I’ll break it to a few points:
Even though it’s a concept no one asked for, it did have some promise but was ruined not just by poor use of characters with some existing just so they can have a one liner at a rival but some of the pages were frankly, terrible. Unfinished, poor scaling and using refrences do apprent the fact they show first thing on google images gives an idea how rushed this was.
Blame can’t be on sayazur for ruining his own work, it should had been rejected by salagir till there was some quality to it. Even if some if the artists could not do any better, the pages that had just flat colouring and no shading even was bad.
There are about four websites and three discord servers that have Dbm as a topic, all of them can’t agree on if the main story of Dbm is good but all do agree that this was a very poor story that has bruised the credibility of its main artist and leads but it also could had been prevented if they tried to revise the work and story and not rush it for what is a non-canon explanation to Dbm broly.
Blame can't be on Sayazur for ruining his own work...? What are you saying? That makes no sense.
Even though it’s a concept no one asked for, it did have some promise but was ruined not just by poor use of characters with some existing just so they can have a one liner at a rival but some of the pages were frankly, terrible. Unfinished, poor scaling and using refrences do apprent the fact they show first thing on google images gives an idea how rushed this was.
Blame can’t be on sayazur for ruining his own work, it should had been rejected by salagir till there was some quality to it. Even if some if the artists could not do any better, the pages that had just flat colouring and no shading even was bad.
There are about four websites and three discord servers that have Dbm as a topic, all of them can’t agree on if the main story of Dbm is good but all do agree that this was a very poor story that has bruised the credibility of its main artist and leads but it also could had been prevented if they tried to revise the work and story and not rush it for what is a non-canon explanation to Dbm broly.
Blame can't be on Sayazur for ruining his own work...? What are you saying? That makes no sense.
That there were several people that looked at this and no one from Malpha etc looked at this and said ‘This page needs further work.’ Everyone involved was more interested in pumping out a product then revising content. Yes it was under Sayazur all the same but there wasn’t any pushback or serious discussion how the story would be done. And as mentioned Salagir gave this the ok but could also had said to basically revise some details before applying the story to be published. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
March 13th
Bah to you both! I think previous chapter was fine but my view is the recap was longer than it should be and should be balanced out by more of the setting it’s in.
We’re at the here and now so that’s the main thing.
(Even I’d trunks wielded double blades he be never as cool as skeletor from 2002 he-man, he double wielded like a boss!
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We’re at the here and now so that’s the main thing.
(Even I’d trunks wielded double blades he be never as cool as skeletor from 2002 he-man, he double wielded like a boss!
thebritwriter
March 13th
I’ll just be a broken record if I bring up points must comment se toon have done. So I’ll break it to a few points:
Even though it’s a concept no one asked for, it did have some promise but was ruined not just by poor use of characters with some existing just so they can have a one liner at a rival but some of the pages were frankly, terrible. Unfinished, poor scaling and using refrences do apprent the fact they show first thing on google images gives an idea how rushed this was.
Blame can’t be on sayazur for ruining his own work, it should had been rejected by salagir till there was some quality to it. Even if some if the artists could not do any better, the pages that had just flat colouring and no shading even was bad.
There are about four websites and three discord servers that have Dbm as a topic, all of them can’t agree on if the main story of Dbm is good but all do agree that this was a very poor story that has bruised the credibility of its main artist and leads but it also could had been prevented if they tried to revise the work and story and not rush it for what is a non-canon explanation to Dbm broly. 2 Replie(s)
DBMultiverse Special OAV - Broly Final War page 74
Even though it’s a concept no one asked for, it did have some promise but was ruined not just by poor use of characters with some existing just so they can have a one liner at a rival but some of the pages were frankly, terrible. Unfinished, poor scaling and using refrences do apprent the fact they show first thing on google images gives an idea how rushed this was.
Blame can’t be on sayazur for ruining his own work, it should had been rejected by salagir till there was some quality to it. Even if some if the artists could not do any better, the pages that had just flat colouring and no shading even was bad.
There are about four websites and three discord servers that have Dbm as a topic, all of them can’t agree on if the main story of Dbm is good but all do agree that this was a very poor story that has bruised the credibility of its main artist and leads but it also could had been prevented if they tried to revise the work and story and not rush it for what is a non-canon explanation to Dbm broly. 2 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
March 13th
Wait that was the first chapter? Bit of a let down given it was 90% recap but we’ll see how this goes moving forward.
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thebritwriter
March 13th
hetap was saying:
So, I think this confirms that the lie Thorn was talking about was that Gero did not kill Gohan. He turned him into an android. Before people thought the lie was that they were able to kill a cyborg, but Krillin confirms here that he did indeed kill one (somehow lol, guessing Kienzan).
Looking back at the comments (and my own view on it) it seemed very likely the reveal would be Gohan being a cyborg because dealing his fate in such a trivial manner almost entirely off-screen if you will never added weight and barely and Gast never shown a reaction. So it looks like that be the case and well…. I be surprised if that isn’t the case.
thebritwriter
March 11th
That line to shadow about why he was named that was so cringey, not the cringiest a sonic game has done but they really stretched the plausibility of that claim. We get it girl you can wanted to say shadow because you don’t like to say black, it’s ok Maria we get it, your a closet racist.
Chibi Son Bra did her best! page 195
thebritwriter
March 9th
Kongming5 was saying:
, and its reeally powerful, Especially against living THINGS!
Get off the computer and get back to exploring the mansion, Barry.
thebritwriter
March 9th
Dammit another flashback page (not really I know)
Interesting so far, I wouldn’t mind if the author popped on here to give some commentary , surprised he been quiet about this.
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Interesting so far, I wouldn’t mind if the author popped on here to give some commentary , surprised he been quiet about this.
thebritwriter
March 9th
I wouldn’t had mind seeing an actual plan in effect, priority has been shifted too much on Easter egg cameos (previous page) and this run away debacle. I think I’ll borrow the taser from civvie11 enforcing no python references.
Now smoke screen I admit could be useful (with DBS infamous zamasu and Goku black losing Goku because of it) so
We’ll see how it plays given the cyborgs ability to pick energy from engines as well as standard energy. So it shouldn’t work but could also work.
Still the real deal of this chapter is seeing how gast’s fight will be drawn out if a certain bug man shows up and keen to see how that plays out.
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Now smoke screen I admit could be useful (with DBS infamous zamasu and Goku black losing Goku because of it) so
We’ll see how it plays given the cyborgs ability to pick energy from engines as well as standard energy. So it shouldn’t work but could also work.
Still the real deal of this chapter is seeing how gast’s fight will be drawn out if a certain bug man shows up and keen to see how that plays out.
thebritwriter
March 5th
Koshej was saying:
thebritwriter was saying: Krish was saying: And finally the recap ends
OR DOES IT?
Ok, I think it now comes to an end.
This is literally where it ends in the anime, loool.
I even posted that video on one of the last chapters - but I see people outright ignore me for some reason.
OR DOES IT?
Ok, I think it now comes to an end.
This is literally where it ends in the anime, loool.
I even posted that video on one of the last chapters - but I see people outright ignore me for some reason.
Not everyone follows comment section page per page or even recap the previous pages. This is one of those occasions where most people know it would be on a predictable flashback trend.
I doubt people are outright ignoring you often a case either they didn’t see your comment or sent have anything worth replying about.
thebritwriter
March 4th
Krish was saying:
And finally the recap ends
OR DOES IT?
Ok, I think it now comes to an end. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
March 4th
le nuage was saying:
In a few year, maybe we'll release the uncensored version of Chibi Son Bra.
When you're ready :D
When you're ready :D
I expect an Amazon prime release with J. K. Simmons voicing Son Bra. I don’t if that’s odd. Get that contract done!
thebritwriter
March 4th
Goku JR is okay was saying:
Not a monologue oh god!!!
Phipsil monologue vs Phicard monologue. Their lecture will be legendary but offscreen.
thebritwriter
March 4th
‘Shock the youngest viewers’
This just reinforces my theory that this season of CSB has been hit by further cuts in its production costs. It seems DBM studio is unwilling to further fund a new season let alone exciting fights.
How long before we get 14 page recaps of events we already know for sake of padding out the story? (Looking at you ‘the inexorable distortion!’)
Fan petition for season 3!
Chibi Son Bra did her best! page 194
This just reinforces my theory that this season of CSB has been hit by further cuts in its production costs. It seems DBM studio is unwilling to further fund a new season let alone exciting fights.
How long before we get 14 page recaps of events we already know for sake of padding out the story? (Looking at you ‘the inexorable distortion!’)
Fan petition for season 3!
thebritwriter
February 21st
Uzurper was saying:
Does anyone else still hold a grudge about how they ended the Goku Black Ark?
I didn’t have a issue with the concept itself (a villain winning) compared to so many arcs where the big bad was stopped and everything was wished back. The idea that something could irreversible I think has merit. But the arc had some very flawed issues.
— Goku constantly being an idiot, not knowing what a kids is, forgetting a item and then forgetting the seal that could stop zamasu. His dumb moments were just annnoying and not even funny.
— They never addressed how Trunks could have a chance against immortal zamasu, so if he had won it would be a lingering cop out on the basis he ‘just did’ if there were hints throughout if Trunks did this and that leading to it, I think it would have merit or basis if a false hope.
— Zamasu engulfing multiverse was so out of nowhere. He can intertwine with reality, some clue to that being intention or it was feasible I think was needed. It didn’t help they address the crazy power level jumps.
Zamasu winning is fine by itself (not everyone wins) but it was just all over the place.
thebritwriter
February 15th
There’s a sense of dejavu with narrative backstory on events known to us like with tales of bardock on here in that pacing is longer then it should be. What it should be is chibi dam z should try to see this from a new reader. We know it’s aimed at those that know Trunks’ story, will those that follow him read up on his past or flick past the page (I believe this was printed at one point)
This story is several years old so no idea what changed since but for his own benefit it would had been better to try and condense the known past, combine it in a creative sense and then just push onto the new uncharted story.
The inexorable distortion page 7
This story is several years old so no idea what changed since but for his own benefit it would had been better to try and condense the known past, combine it in a creative sense and then just push onto the new uncharted story.
thebritwriter
February 13th
Dislpay name was saying:
Already i don't have a good feeling about this manga because it's suffering from "tell don't show", admitetly even Toriyama had this problem but it was never this bad nor was it the case with other fanmangas i've read.
thebritwriter was saying:
I have to admit I don’t have a good opinion of dragon ball super fan mangas and that’s mainly due to not enough of them where the vast majority isn’t great.
The one I’m thinking of was done by an Italian artist and somehow zamasu came back, by going into Gohan rearmed (pun intended) and the fight scene it had was more a long dragged take of hopelessness. Trunks died Gohan black wins, wants to go across the multiverse but to do that please sign my patreon and be impressed by 20 second animated of Gohan black where there’d a flash in background and a small smirk.
I swear to god there were two takes of this Gohan black.
Then there a dbs fan manga where frieza killed zeno by a ‘god blade’ and to rub salt on wound I think that was the only super comic considered completed.
I’ll admit I thought hakai was going somewhere but lost interest when the author wanted to make a franchise out of it,
And kakumei just dosent have good writing.
I’m not going to be judgemental but the history of super fan comics hadn’t been well, super. But the start is fine so far.
Kakumei isn't that bad imo but it just goes to places where dragonball should never go to if that makes sense, and i haven't paid attention to hakai in a while so i can't really comment on it but if what you're saying about the writer trying to make a franchise out if it is true then i'll be very pessimistic. sounds like he's trying to bite more than he can chew.
thebritwriter was saying:
I have to admit I don’t have a good opinion of dragon ball super fan mangas and that’s mainly due to not enough of them where the vast majority isn’t great.
The one I’m thinking of was done by an Italian artist and somehow zamasu came back, by going into Gohan rearmed (pun intended) and the fight scene it had was more a long dragged take of hopelessness. Trunks died Gohan black wins, wants to go across the multiverse but to do that please sign my patreon and be impressed by 20 second animated of Gohan black where there’d a flash in background and a small smirk.
I swear to god there were two takes of this Gohan black.
Then there a dbs fan manga where frieza killed zeno by a ‘god blade’ and to rub salt on wound I think that was the only super comic considered completed.
I’ll admit I thought hakai was going somewhere but lost interest when the author wanted to make a franchise out of it,
And kakumei just dosent have good writing.
I’m not going to be judgemental but the history of super fan comics hadn’t been well, super. But the start is fine so far.
Kakumei isn't that bad imo but it just goes to places where dragonball should never go to if that makes sense, and i haven't paid attention to hakai in a while so i can't really comment on it but if what you're saying about the writer trying to make a franchise out if it is true then i'll be very pessimistic. sounds like he's trying to bite more than he can chew.
The hakai part where the author wants to make a franchise is quite true, I spoke to him via mondo cool if (in return for backing him) the author would put hakai on Dbm as a exclusive.
Now I was prepared to pay quite a bit so he didn’t need to use patreon where it can be uploaded into here (and this was when hakai stalled) outlining have the main chapters done.
However he said he still wanted to do a franchise and outlined several side special projects (and realised it was never going to see a end goal)
I looked at his work prior and as it was felt he only neeeded 15 more chapters (and was prepared to pay for them) but he had ideas for a lot including a second tournament of power.
New age never replied back and bloodlines did answer and refer to salagir but I think they refused.
Kakumei I don’t mind some of their darker stuff because Dbm has gone those paces also but some of the characters aren’t good, prioritising selling volumes meant the story has dragged far longer than it should. (They we’re steadfast in releasing a chapter of vegeta vs a destroyer candidate where part of it was bad, rushed artwork with several pages look like sketches done on first go but did it because they were behind and wanted to sell)
I also think a number of designs don’t gel well, take their design of the rouge angels. But the point above is my biggest issue with kakumei.
thebritwriter
February 11th
Damian Qualshy was saying:
thebritwriter was saying: Ok, though cautious if is going to flip and be ‘it’s Gohan black’ because everyone loved that insufferable concept.
It’s nicely drawn, exposition feels a bit out of place as Mai would had known this befriend Trunks before Black came. And if it’s for the reader, the knowledge is as common as superman comes from krypton (gave away spoilers, sorry!)
Recaps are good for authors to find their own pacing so there is that.
Well, it's Goku on the cover. Although I can't figure out what is Zamasu and Trunks fusion doing there...
It’s nicely drawn, exposition feels a bit out of place as Mai would had known this befriend Trunks before Black came. And if it’s for the reader, the knowledge is as common as superman comes from krypton (gave away spoilers, sorry!)
Recaps are good for authors to find their own pacing so there is that.
Well, it's Goku on the cover. Although I can't figure out what is Zamasu and Trunks fusion doing there...
I have to admit I don’t have a good opinion of dragon ball super fan mangas and that’s mainly due to not enough of them where the vast majority isn’t great.
The one I’m thinking of was done by an Italian artist and somehow zamasu came back, by going into Gohan rearmed (pun intended) and the fight scene it had was more a long dragged take of hopelessness. Trunks died Gohan black wins, wants to go across the multiverse but to do that please sign my patreon and be impressed by 20 second animated of Gohan black where there’d a flash in background and a small smirk.
I swear to god there were two takes of this Gohan black.
Then there a dbs fan manga where frieza killed zeno by a ‘god blade’ and to rub salt on wound I think that was the only super comic considered completed.
I’ll admit I thought hakai was going somewhere but lost interest when the author wanted to make a franchise out of it,
And kakumei just dosent have good writing.
I’m not going to be judgemental but the history of super fan comics hadn’t been well, super. But the start is fine so far.
As for why trunks fused with zamasu I’m going to guess that the zamasu trunks meets is a good version. 2 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
February 11th
Ok, though cautious if is going to flip and be ‘it’s Gohan black’ because everyone loved that insufferable concept.
It’s nicely drawn, exposition feels a bit out of place as Mai would had known this befriend Trunks before Black came. And if it’s for the reader, the knowledge is as common as superman comes from krypton (gave away spoilers, sorry!)
Recaps are good for authors to find their own pacing so there is that. 2 Replie(s)
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It’s nicely drawn, exposition feels a bit out of place as Mai would had known this befriend Trunks before Black came. And if it’s for the reader, the knowledge is as common as superman comes from krypton (gave away spoilers, sorry!)
Recaps are good for authors to find their own pacing so there is that. 2 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
February 10th
I like it so, Although 10 years for a time skip is quite long and I can’t imagine frieza caring about the saiyans and even vegeta fat that point in time (or vegeta tolerating his time as lapdog any longer)
By time raditz went to earth werent vegeta and Nappa already doing their own thing as I’m sure the series mentioned vegeta went awol from frieza’s command and that frieza didn’t deal with him right away was because he was at namek as vegeta was healing. 1 Replie(s)
Saigo no Son page 21
By time raditz went to earth werent vegeta and Nappa already doing their own thing as I’m sure the series mentioned vegeta went awol from frieza’s command and that frieza didn’t deal with him right away was because he was at namek as vegeta was healing. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
February 7th
It’s a old 4th wall joke…but the execution of this made me chuckle, almost harkens back to early days of Dbm when arcs were more lighter in tone and such.
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thebritwriter
January 5th
XXI should have save some time and summon himself the farmer’s shotgun.
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thebritwriter
January 3rd
Jesus! And I thought the infamous ‘frieza defeated’ episode title lacked subtlety!
Well, let’s see what happens. 1 Replie(s)
DB Multiverse page 2437
Well, let’s see what happens. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
January 2nd
So I am a little surprised this where the chapter apparently concludes, it does need more pages to at least expand on this thorn and bulma rivalry (personally I would have bulma killed off and have thorn try and fill boots given he has engineering skills)
I will correct this assumpation that just because you are from a more advanced society means you can understand everything more ‘primitive’ or culturally different. You can be the smartest person in the room to know how a wheel is made but if you don’t have the practical skills to fashion then you are not neccsary the most useful. Being hyper capable isn’t a thing, projects take teamwork and local experience. The way Thorn has waltz in and now solving things reminds me of a Steven segal movie.
This bluntness may come about because the story is short but I rather have bulma not on then sidelined, in the main timeline she figured out how to remove 16’s bomb (and discussed this with her dad on best way) and in future trunks timeline she made time machine.
That and capsule corp is the only tech out of all the races in db universe that has minitrised tech via their capsule corp tech but even they don’t know how FTL works.
Thorn at least should need time to understand the tech on earth.
I think most part the chapter is fine but it’s one of those specials that does need more pages for the reasons mentioned. 2 Replie(s)
DB Multiverse page 2436
I will correct this assumpation that just because you are from a more advanced society means you can understand everything more ‘primitive’ or culturally different. You can be the smartest person in the room to know how a wheel is made but if you don’t have the practical skills to fashion then you are not neccsary the most useful. Being hyper capable isn’t a thing, projects take teamwork and local experience. The way Thorn has waltz in and now solving things reminds me of a Steven segal movie.
This bluntness may come about because the story is short but I rather have bulma not on then sidelined, in the main timeline she figured out how to remove 16’s bomb (and discussed this with her dad on best way) and in future trunks timeline she made time machine.
That and capsule corp is the only tech out of all the races in db universe that has minitrised tech via their capsule corp tech but even they don’t know how FTL works.
Thorn at least should need time to understand the tech on earth.
I think most part the chapter is fine but it’s one of those specials that does need more pages for the reasons mentioned. 2 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
December 31st
So out of pages so far, I’ll make a mention on this. I like it, clever way of combing fates of Goku and piccolo without showing their bodies.
It had a vibe of what happens next with intrigue. Well done. 1 Replie(s)
Saigo no Son page 1
It had a vibe of what happens next with intrigue. Well done. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
December 28th
Bunga was saying:
I see that some readers (on this, and other languages comment sections) are mainly debating 2 topics:
1- what is the secret lie that Thorn found out? As you can see on this page, on literally Bulma's first sentence she says Thorn sees they are the good guys after all, implying that they already had a conversation and everything is clarified on both sides. It is a storytelling option so that us, the readers, do not know just now what was it all about, so we'll have to wait until it's time for that to be explained
2- Bulma laughing on the last panel is out of character? I think not, actually I can perfectly see Bulma acting like this dispite the setting being more or less "depressing" because it's part of her personality.
Also, we've seen in the manga and anime some times where the characters are acting funny even in dark situations , coming to mind for example Vegeta and Goku discussing on the Kai's planet just after Kid Buu killing all of their relatives (sons, wives and friends) where we can see they have exaggerated big heads and funny faces.
So in my opinion, it's pretty DragonBall and Toriyama like to add some of these shots to the scene to relieve some tension.
1- what is the secret lie that Thorn found out? As you can see on this page, on literally Bulma's first sentence she says Thorn sees they are the good guys after all, implying that they already had a conversation and everything is clarified on both sides. It is a storytelling option so that us, the readers, do not know just now what was it all about, so we'll have to wait until it's time for that to be explained
2- Bulma laughing on the last panel is out of character? I think not, actually I can perfectly see Bulma acting like this dispite the setting being more or less "depressing" because it's part of her personality.
Also, we've seen in the manga and anime some times where the characters are acting funny even in dark situations , coming to mind for example Vegeta and Goku discussing on the Kai's planet just after Kid Buu killing all of their relatives (sons, wives and friends) where we can see they have exaggerated big heads and funny faces.
So in my opinion, it's pretty DragonBall and Toriyama like to add some of these shots to the scene to relieve some tension.
I have to disagree with both points, more the second.
The problem to the first argument is that it centres on bulma being publicly called out, that isn’t something just to brush aside and put it up later for another day. It can be dealt with by Thorn showing some intuition in picking up on a comment that characters or even the reader. Brushing it offhand isn’t the right way, not when Thorn has challenged the ‘chain of command’ (That being bulma’s authority and perceptive that is seen as factual, to challenge that is to undermine the confidence in anyone else) now there may be a payoff to this so in time we’ll see if this storytelling option pays (although this seems to be an admission that thorn will survive this otherwise how will not know what it was he noticed?)
The second point I have issue with, just because it’s in dragonball dosent mean it can be repeated on here, groping and showing panties is in dragonball but it’s not here.
I’m not agai st an exaggerated payoff, it has worked for vegeta due to his reaction about learning Goku uding bulma as a means to bribe old kai. Something so outrageous it’ll make any reserved character like vegeta snap.
Here it’s abruptly random and future timeline bulma was generally serious, she was more relaxed prior to trunks meeting cell (thinking all threats are gone) it’s not only out of character but loses focus on the story. Bulma wants to find a way to beat the androids has concern to welfare of others but proclaims to be a genius for no reason to have comedy with ego.
It hasn’t helped that two pages ago the page with the email had a message that felt more in place as a mini comic parody.
While I understand the attempt to create humor this is hit and miss being abrupt and dosent enhance any joke or punchline. (We also had lighter tone content in last two pages) To me personally I don’t this was done well or should had been done.
thebritwriter
December 27th
It’s fine but the comical exaggeration of bulma’s face I’m not keen on, I just think it’s uneeded (though why do I keep thinking critters was used as a movie reference for her mouth!?) Page works fine without forced exaggeration.
It’s not bad but we’ll see if there’s any payoff with this ‘lie’ including how he picked it up.
DB Multiverse page 2434
It’s not bad but we’ll see if there’s any payoff with this ‘lie’ including how he picked it up.
thebritwriter
December 23rd
Shabby was saying:
you did amazing at your own spin on it. You didn't copy his art, or his layout, but you copied the mood.
The eyes on Shadow-Janemba feel a bit off but the rest is perfect to me.
I guess I would get rid of the eyes, and apply some definitely to Janemba. A shadowy figure rather than a silhouette, or he's broken a hole in the window and his hand and color-sword are sticking through.
But all that is just a difference of opinion on presentation, your choices were great.
The eyes on Shadow-Janemba feel a bit off but the rest is perfect to me.
I guess I would get rid of the eyes, and apply some definitely to Janemba. A shadowy figure rather than a silhouette, or he's broken a hole in the window and his hand and color-sword are sticking through.
But all that is just a difference of opinion on presentation, your choices were great.
With the eyes, it was a personal choice in order to make a more stronger connection between it and the book XXI is holding (xii refrence to movie 12 where janemba hails from) the eye colouring was to imply XXI did indeed summoned ‘a warrior of evil’
I did actually have the script for XXI vs gast a while back as I asked salagir if I can draw the chapter blind and compare to how asura did it, problem with that is the script was finally given about two months before the chapter was published! So I knew details on cover from script and this was something I had in mind though adapted since seeing asura’s cover for sake of comparison.
thebritwriter
December 21st
iron leaf was saying:
With Asura, the throne room scene from Star Wars was clearly the template, but here, what was the inspiration for this fanart?
Aside of the three musketeers reference.
Aside of the three musketeers reference.
Kinda a mixture of a few ideas.
So I personally believe a cover should foreshadow events or hint on content within the chapter and the series as a whole. when I was way way younger I had crystal maze ‘pick your own adventure’ books. Covers generally had clues or extra detail for anyone bring extra observant.
Also as strange as it sounds I think there has been too many movie references or to America media, might not be within previous Dbm covers but I feel like Star Wars refrences have been too often where it lost some of if it’s appeal.
There wasn’t much refrence with French Media so with Dbm being mainly French I figured go with that.
thebritwriter
December 21st
I have to agree on shabby with this, it’s a true a bad story is easy pickings for over top comments and those go beyond criticism but a bad story can be avoidable. This has been inconsistent and not helped by Sayazur’s deflecting criticism or making things up (like saying he was hit by dozens of pings on discord for questions which never happened)
The only bit that was out of order was a member of the Latin America group changing Sayazur’s page.
But this should have been pushed back till it was more consistent, I know spacebattles actually did this (a much larger forum with art section that had some dragon ball fans posting their own art) one guy did a art story which was more or less a series of random panels much like Sayazur’s, only mods stepped in locked the thread and didn’t open it till that artist improved his comic (which he did)
The comic won’t be locked of course but it needed feedback before deciding to see it published.
DBMultiverse Special OAV - Broly Final War page 50
The only bit that was out of order was a member of the Latin America group changing Sayazur’s page.
But this should have been pushed back till it was more consistent, I know spacebattles actually did this (a much larger forum with art section that had some dragon ball fans posting their own art) one guy did a art story which was more or less a series of random panels much like Sayazur’s, only mods stepped in locked the thread and didn’t open it till that artist improved his comic (which he did)
The comic won’t be locked of course but it needed feedback before deciding to see it published.
thebritwriter
December 18th
thebritwriter
December 15th
Michelrpg was saying:
Wait so.... those androids could detect engines and such, but a hub that likely consumes way more power than most remaining human cities went virtually undetected?
Gero is shit at building proper power detectors.
Gero is shit at building proper power detectors.
If being nit picky it’s amazing they hadn’t been found sooner, all these computers, lighting need a generator to support it. I’m assuming their base is on the ground because of how high ceiling is, unless they dug a deep hole and excavated.
It’s possible this existed before the crisis as a backup but we don’t know how they solved the issue of not being picked by the cameo cyborgs.
What isn’t acceptable is bulma smoking in such a electrical exposed setting and two kids running around, being a distraction or possibly ruining research by tripping on wires.
When cities have no power this stands out as a lighthouse of energy output. It’s a fine page but it does have some questions lurking under it. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
December 15th
This is missing a special, Gast’s connections is fleeting at best, if we want a bond established there should be content inbetween this. Is he friend by previous unknown adventure or did he feel he had a closer bond because he was the one (I think) that read his mind and him concerned is more out of that?
Either way I think something was needed if he’s just being the new piccolo at this point.
I’m going to guess there’s an army of cyborgs on earth right and maybe Gohan is the new android 17. 1 Replie(s)
DB Multiverse page 2429
Either way I think something was needed if he’s just being the new piccolo at this point.
I’m going to guess there’s an army of cyborgs on earth right and maybe Gohan is the new android 17. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
December 11th
DrewSaga was saying:
Don't worry #31, she is just helping Thorn fuel the spaceship with the energy she stole from Gast.
Now time for #31 to eat some Honey Smacks cereal.
Shabby was saying: seems a little wild, he was so drained he could barely move, but had enough power to deal real blow to someone who just stole his power?
I think Gast was just sandbagging it like Piccolo was doing with Gero in DBZ.
Now time for #31 to eat some Honey Smacks cereal.
Shabby was saying: seems a little wild, he was so drained he could barely move, but had enough power to deal real blow to someone who just stole his power?
I think Gast was just sandbagging it like Piccolo was doing with Gero in DBZ.
True but even piccolo needed but if a breather, gast was like ‘oh. That’
I do like the angles the action was done, kinda wish a destructo disc was thrown instead of a leaping in kick.
Bit surprised the cyborg didn’t pick up krillin’s energy with the ‘pick up energies hence why I’m walking’ but that could be chalked to not being focused. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
December 11th
Meng_Shu was saying:
The next chapter will take place at McDonald's!
Luigi as the next antagonist confirmed!
thebritwriter
December 9th
Find out who it is next…after these sponsorship messages.
Chibi Son Bra did her best! page 182
thebritwriter
December 8th
Did he see their devices on their hand? They were draining energy but I don’t think he could had seen their hands, (gast didn’t either)
Thankfully the ship that has a charger that plug into android as well as iPhone. Thorn is surviving ok so far. 1 Replie(s)
DB Multiverse page 2426
Thankfully the ship that has a charger that plug into android as well as iPhone. Thorn is surviving ok so far. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
November 29th
One thing I noted is gast height changes often, if he was tall like 17ft he was, the woman shouldn’t had been able to get her arms around him, I don’t fault the artist for this but it’s why I’m not a fan of gast apparently being so tall because you can’t really fit him in.
That and the energy drain is a bit too quick, gero’s took time with piccolo (and had him in a better lock) here gast looks ready to smash his arm to her and faints. Perhaps Gast is French for fraud. 2 Replie(s)
DB Multiverse page 2422
That and the energy drain is a bit too quick, gero’s took time with piccolo (and had him in a better lock) here gast looks ready to smash his arm to her and faints. Perhaps Gast is French for fraud. 2 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
November 25th
ZidaneTribal was saying:
thebritwriter was saying: Sayazur was saying: Did you dream about it? Here it is at last! GOGETA ARRIVES ON DBM!!!
See how this turns out.
Why edit your post?
See how this turns out.
Why edit your post?
I was in a bad mood earlier due too offline related matter and that mood carried over on when making the post. My original comment wasn’t my best post and should had posted when I was more calm.
thebritwriter
November 25th
Sayazur was saying:
Did you dream about it? Here it is at last! GOGETA ARRIVES ON DBM!!!
See how this turns out. 2 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
November 24th
foiopaulo was saying:
Was just re-reading Ghast's specials lately, and something got me thinking: how strong would be a fused U16+U18 Piccolo be?
I was going to say piccolo’s power at his peak in Z was comparable to android 17 but I don’t think fusion of the two piccolos would be comparable to fusion of two android 17’s (no one can beat piccolo when he’s super piccolo!)
I guess if trying to get a somewhat accurate gauge we can look at how much power piccolo got after fusing with nail. He went from namek saga vegeta level to fighting second form frieza.
So my guess is a fusion with two piccolos (who fused with kami) I say is multiplier of three to their current power level. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
November 24th
J.I.L was saying:
Ngl... this is doing too much. I get it kinda makes sense for new Androids... but DBM is at its best when they expand on the characters we already have. I don't care about these fanfiction androids at all. It'd be way more interesting if he met Gero and 19, and we got like some sort of special of the fate of the Z-fighters, leading up to this.
That's captivating...
Because this is not.
That's captivating...
Because this is not.
I do get this point, after all android 19 has no origin and who knows if more was intended. So there are more character lore that can be expanded on official ones.
That said oc’s can spice up the game (look at XXI)
It depends how they are utilised, now if they bring worldbuilding and being a obstacle for characters to overcome that’s fine but fodder for sake of making someone more badass without the challenge I think is a hinderance.
We’ll just see.
thebritwriter
November 24th
quem mudou esta página, você está louco!
Bom desenho, mas ainda não consigo acreditar que você fez isso. 1 Replie(s)
DBMultiverse Special OAV - Broly Final War page 42
Bom desenho, mas ainda não consigo acreditar que você fez isso. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
November 24th
Normally this would be the point where the fight ends, but I doubt these androids were updated with a thinking capacity.
DB Multiverse page 2420
thebritwriter
November 23rd
DDDDD was saying:
DBM is an impressive undertaking, but seriously, would it kill them to get a single native English speaker to review their dialogue? Some pages in this comic contain extremely obvious gramatical errors that even an English-speaking child would have been able to catch (eg. "Stopping Tenshinhan, it's enough!"), or sentences that just straight-up don't make any sense, like this page. I'm sure there are countless fans who would happily do it for free, or hell, even just ask ChatGPT to have a look.
One of the things Salagir asks for is his script to be respected, that said that there can be one or two lines where something may seem a bit confusing which are worth highlighting.
Bunga was saying:
Lucas was saying: Wait, what? Is Piccolo not adult size already? What does he mean with "this one grew to adult size"? I'd get it if they only saw Dende, but they mentioned Piccolo so I don't get it.
They mean "adult size" because Gast is way bigger than Piccolo
They mean "adult size" because Gast is way bigger than Piccolo
You can walk down the street and tell if someone short is a teenager or a small adult or vice versa, recognising the distinct physical changes. A 5’7 adult is an adult, someone who is 6’7 isn’t even more of an adult. Piccolo grew his size in original dragon ball and demon king piccolo first showed up as a old namekian. Even kami (without disguise) was apprent in the tournament where piccolo grew 50ft.
There’s plenty of detail Gero had from his spying to know namekians (or a ‘piccolo’) don’t keep getting bigger as they older. If anything they should be pointing out he’s considerably large for a ‘piccolo’ compared to king piccolo, piccolo and kami.
thebritwriter
November 16th
@Ironleaf
Neva is a namekian from the demon realm, upon arriving to earth he manage to summon the dragon balls to him (even though they were stone) and made them active.
So Gast comment about it being impossible is only true for himself. The bigger problem is Gast would know who Neva was, him regarded as a legend in namekian lore.
In short: DB Daima isn’t compatible. 1 Replie(s)
DB Multiverse page 2416
Neva is a namekian from the demon realm, upon arriving to earth he manage to summon the dragon balls to him (even though they were stone) and made them active.
So Gast comment about it being impossible is only true for himself. The bigger problem is Gast would know who Neva was, him regarded as a legend in namekian lore.
In short: DB Daima isn’t compatible. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
November 15th
I swear everyone wants holographic panels, a bid to join the MCU?
I don’t think frieza would know where earth is or placed it on his list straight away, didn’t he only learn of it after vegeta’s defeat and went straight to namek?
I’m guessing gast must have visited earth before because he only met bulma and co once, but premature to consider them friends when they haven’t done anything for him so far. 1 Replie(s)
DB Multiverse page 2416
I don’t think frieza would know where earth is or placed it on his list straight away, didn’t he only learn of it after vegeta’s defeat and went straight to namek?
I’m guessing gast must have visited earth before because he only met bulma and co once, but premature to consider them friends when they haven’t done anything for him so far. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
November 13th
I personally wish the cover had its own idea than imitate a earlier dragonball cover, maybe I’m just getting tired of ‘Easter eggs’ and other pop culture refrences for sake of cool than continuity. if this was before dragon ball returned with battle of gods etc where a nod reference to similir covers I would had appreciated it but U don’t think it’s striking as a idea, where too similir takes like this have come and gone.
We’ll see how the pages fare in the coming weeks. 1 Replie(s)
DB Multiverse page 2415
We’ll see how the pages fare in the coming weeks. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
November 12th
…
And this is why DBM need random drug testing on its artists
Chibi Son Bra did her best! page 178
And this is why DBM need random drug testing on its artists
thebritwriter
November 9th
RockyJoe was saying:
the hell is Naruto doing there and when did he train in the ways of the Tri-Force?
The individual there is a misguided Zelda fan, everyone knows that Metroid is peak Nintendo.
thebritwriter
October 15th
So…who’s going to feed chibi bra her own heart?
Chibi Son Bra did her best! page 174
thebritwriter
October 13th
OrbPonderer was saying:
I gotta say, Piccolo is rocking that demon sword.
Agree also, ki blades are overrated, cold steel all the way!
thebritwriter
October 13th
Damian Qualshy was saying:
goten-kun was saying: Yes, Namekians aren't demons. Only Piccolo was. That's weird but, yes, he was. He changed and he wasn't considered a demon after that.
That's not really important actually.
I guess with the new Daima revelation it makes sense that evil Namekians are actually demons, unlike their peaceful brothers? And since Daimao was THE evil part of Nameless Namekian... I think we should treat Daima with the same care as the Manga because it IS pure late Toriyama work again.
That's not really important actually.
I guess with the new Daima revelation it makes sense that evil Namekians are actually demons, unlike their peaceful brothers? And since Daimao was THE evil part of Nameless Namekian... I think we should treat Daima with the same care as the Manga because it IS pure late Toriyama work again.
It is late Toroyama work but namekians had four fingers in the manga (which is a controversial thing to do in Japan for Toriyama as four fingers were meant you were an ex member of the yakuza) so there is a subtle gag that the nameks were perhaps were former members of something else. So the revision that they were demons that left another to another realm fits with the four finger design. Do this does build up on what’s established before.
It does serve an example that fanfics etc cannot forsee and anticipate every new adaption. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
October 12th
Namekians were Demons? guess that means ones on the mortal realm are trying to achieve a form of penance by living their seemingly monk lifestyle.
Namekseijin Densetsu page 542
thebritwriter
October 3rd
It comes off less impressive and signficant when this same style of attack is done again barely 9 pages after (page 19) bar an extra additional character. Same attack in same location with barely any difference in time.
If broly was down I might understand repeating this but he powered up while Goku and vegeta have time to quip, the importance of this attack is just not here. It could do have its variety or a different approach.
DBMultiverse Special OAV - Broly Final War page 28
If broly was down I might understand repeating this but he powered up while Goku and vegeta have time to quip, the importance of this attack is just not here. It could do have its variety or a different approach.
thebritwriter
September 27th
A legend, now old has returned. Ok I know what’s going on, I saw ‘the last Jedi’ and expect Goku to be a bitter recluse come next page! You can’t fool us Goten-king or should that be Rian Johnson!
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321Y page 332
thebritwriter
September 21st
@Sayazur
Saying it’s a publication pacing issue is flat out false, yes comics can be long but the idea of Goku using instant transmission and from that moment to when he arrives, we see cooler killed offscreen, cell dead, a group attack and frieza dead is bad pacing. If you are not depicting the move as instant then it’s not really instant transmission. You also done this for second time with Kai, treating both to let in what is essentially a commercial break of exposition. If your going to use I.T you try to keep it within the same page of action or follow it up next page
As an example here are some extracts I have here.
https://postimg.cc/47GR09dr/958cfdec
https://postimg.cc/qtfPt38z/af0bdc40
Instant transmission works best when it’s part of the action but as a interlude or just after the fight, in your comic case it hasn’t been used effectively, if supreme kai fusion can kai kai broly then teleport him straight to ssj3 Goku to do damage and then follow him onto the others for their attack. You are under utilising fighting abilities. Which drags the fight and removes more tension and speed. 1 Replie(s)
DBMultiverse Special OAV - Broly Final War page 24
Saying it’s a publication pacing issue is flat out false, yes comics can be long but the idea of Goku using instant transmission and from that moment to when he arrives, we see cooler killed offscreen, cell dead, a group attack and frieza dead is bad pacing. If you are not depicting the move as instant then it’s not really instant transmission. You also done this for second time with Kai, treating both to let in what is essentially a commercial break of exposition. If your going to use I.T you try to keep it within the same page of action or follow it up next page
As an example here are some extracts I have here.
https://postimg.cc/47GR09dr/958cfdec
https://postimg.cc/qtfPt38z/af0bdc40
Instant transmission works best when it’s part of the action but as a interlude or just after the fight, in your comic case it hasn’t been used effectively, if supreme kai fusion can kai kai broly then teleport him straight to ssj3 Goku to do damage and then follow him onto the others for their attack. You are under utilising fighting abilities. Which drags the fight and removes more tension and speed. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
September 19th
That’s a weak way of papering over inconsistency to say Goku took his time when it comes down to the comic’s own issues with proper pacing.
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DBMultiverse Special OAV - Broly Final War page 24
thebritwriter
September 19th
This could be a nonsical reference or maybe the last panel is actually implying a darker season 2 (come to think of it most season 2 shows are usually darker)
Chibi Son Bra did her best! page 170
thebritwriter
September 19th
My only issue with this three panel was age is it looks like shots of the fight instead of seeing the bout more in motion. I know Janemba is swinging his sword a lot but he also (from the movie) was chasing after goku, move and slash I think we could do seeing from him.
DB Multiverse page 2393
thebritwriter
September 19th
Carrot was saying:
DracoDeVis was saying: I think the one they are missing might be the four-star ball, so my guess is Grandpa Gohan's house.
Same thought
Same thought
This seems safe to assume with the callbacks and nods to the past. Though there is enough uncertainty to generate interest where this is going.
thebritwriter
September 18th
Meng_Shu was saying:
Wonder who the monkey and cricket will be portrayed by (if they appear), that is assuming that Bros Goku didn't accidentally eat them...
Their probably hiding, Mario has hurt more animals than eggman, even if Son Bros is possibly a kinder Mario incarnation then say Dorkly’s Mario.
thebritwriter
August 30th
‘I manage to stall the conclusion of this fight!’
‘Oh, how?’
‘By getting the dragon to wish for the artist to draw another 500 pages of this fight’
‘Curse you!!’
I don’t have much to add, aside from curious in how this will be concluded.
Namekseijin Densetsu page 524
‘Oh, how?’
‘By getting the dragon to wish for the artist to draw another 500 pages of this fight’
‘Curse you!!’
I don’t have much to add, aside from curious in how this will be concluded.
thebritwriter
August 16th
I have to wonder if DBM ever got a remake in a few years time (like superman!) will there be a refrence to the new SW instead of the old?
We may never know.
I wonder if Star Wars is a intended refrence for gast as this was the case for his second social cover
DB Multiverse page 2379
We may never know.
I wonder if Star Wars is a intended refrence for gast as this was the case for his second social cover
thebritwriter
August 15th
I get what your saying ouv, I would recommend when declaring level of accomplishments sute achieved in terms of readership some evidence is shown, it is all about trust I agree but whenever possible evidence for numbers do need to seem to be believed.
DB Multiverse page 2378
thebritwriter
August 15th
Nobody is saying we’re the bad guys (and I’m not saying that either) but you can’t go throwing numbers without some visual (a chart etc) I only had 150 visits on my deviant page, despite it linked to the mini comics. I hadn’t seen much explosion of interests in other artists either. Rogeru may be the exception as he already has a following.
So if it is read by 500,000 a month then why has that Number not carried over onto say deviantart if the artists or Dbm Facebook, or the discord. Even the attention to the artist patreon and his webcomic has been about non-existent. Lenuage’s tally is small and he’s got arguably the most popular series beyond main Dbm.
If your going to write down big numbers you do need to show some hard evidence because 500k views per month isn’t translating into Facebook judging it.
DB Multiverse page 2378
So if it is read by 500,000 a month then why has that Number not carried over onto say deviantart if the artists or Dbm Facebook, or the discord. Even the attention to the artist patreon and his webcomic has been about non-existent. Lenuage’s tally is small and he’s got arguably the most popular series beyond main Dbm.
If your going to write down big numbers you do need to show some hard evidence because 500k views per month isn’t translating into Facebook judging it.
thebritwriter
August 15th
Ouv was saying:
WukongTheMighty was saying: DBM is nowhere even close to as popular as it once was.
That is not true :
DBM numbers of monthly single readers has been the same for the last ten years.
Before that, it grew until the current level of readers.
There is no growth and no decline when it comes to DBM popularity.
Every time some chapter disappoints some readers (which is fair, DBM cannot please everybody all the time), there are talks about "lots of readers leaving" or "a decline in popularity".
If there had some waves of readers leaving DBM, then they have been replaced at the same time by the exact same numbers of readers.
The sum of all comments on each pages in all languages are not close to 1% or the readership.
Every reader has the right to his/her opinion (and we also have diverging opinions on some chapters in the team sometimes), and negative options are as welcome as the positive ones (if polite, of course). IBecause n the end, a reader that wrote his/her negative opinion still took the time to read us and to write us.
Based on Google Analytics, sweeping statements like "It was better before !" or "readers keeps leaving" do not reflect in the statistics. :)
DBM has found its readership, it is stable, and it is faithful, for which we are very grateful to all of you :)
That is not true :
DBM numbers of monthly single readers has been the same for the last ten years.
Before that, it grew until the current level of readers.
There is no growth and no decline when it comes to DBM popularity.
Every time some chapter disappoints some readers (which is fair, DBM cannot please everybody all the time), there are talks about "lots of readers leaving" or "a decline in popularity".
If there had some waves of readers leaving DBM, then they have been replaced at the same time by the exact same numbers of readers.
The sum of all comments on each pages in all languages are not close to 1% or the readership.
Every reader has the right to his/her opinion (and we also have diverging opinions on some chapters in the team sometimes), and negative options are as welcome as the positive ones (if polite, of course). IBecause n the end, a reader that wrote his/her negative opinion still took the time to read us and to write us.
Based on Google Analytics, sweeping statements like "It was better before !" or "readers keeps leaving" do not reflect in the statistics. :)
DBM has found its readership, it is stable, and it is faithful, for which we are very grateful to all of you :)
Ok, for real saying ‘not even readership here covers 1%’ is a sweeping statement itself.
I have no care for this and even joked to a mod that he should take phone in sick instead of moderating the last few pages.
After all I’m on good terms with a YouTuber who covers Dbm and says there’s been a decline in views and positive comments towards Dbm. If we were to compile threads on Dbm in Reddit also they have been increasing cyclical.
This is not to say Dbm has become watch to hate, but seriously just throwing in ‘not even 1%’ is either factual or arrogant posturing. There would be forums that would say show the evidence were you to proclaim that (it’s what I did with someone else when committing over a month of my time delving into dbm’s popularity over the many years.) And I’m not the only one, skar delves into showcasing evidence.
Show the stats and let them put a close if Dbm is getting popular or less popular belief and where it’s strongest popularity resides.
thebritwriter
August 6th
All that’s missing to maximise cringe factor is to throw in Public Service Announcements for kids which end with everyone showing one big happy grin.
1 Replie(s)
Chibi Son Bra did her best! page 164
thebritwriter
July 20th 2024
I was a bit baffled why demon king piccolo was there before realising that was meant to be piccolo.
My guess is we’ll get a fusion rampage before elder kai rushes in.
That said I’m surprised he’s put down as this powerful.
DB Multiverse page 2367
My guess is we’ll get a fusion rampage before elder kai rushes in.
That said I’m surprised he’s put down as this powerful.
thebritwriter
July 20th 2024
Oozaru image in background to go alongside his anger is a nice touch, though this is in a market place where I think there should had been a reaction to this disturbance to avoid the seemingly emptiness it unintentionally falls into.
That said it would mean more work and this page is fine as it is.
Yamoshi Story page 12
That said it would mean more work and this page is fine as it is.
thebritwriter
July 18th 2024
For all the wackiness beforehand, the explosion does hit hard.
Guess it’ll be resolved by Friday (Too long a wait!)
DB Multiverse page 2366
Guess it’ll be resolved by Friday (Too long a wait!)
thebritwriter
July 16th 2024
Teleported_Bread was saying:
Sayazur was saying: thebritwriter was saying: So broly was doing nothing in the span of a year? The guy that can now one hit galaxies (or at least destroy a super black hole) just did nothing since? He defeated the strongest fusion imaginable but individual training will overcome that? I’m sure at this point good chunk of the universe is void of galaxies with the way broly is.
Just use the namekian dragon ball to bring back someone as a immortal and wish them to be Lssj. Or have Goku and vegeta have potara, wish back and then grant immortality.
the whole year later aspect opens up more problems then it should , at this point this chapter will be more about how well drawn the action is. I personally think this whole year later was a bad call.
Edit: I’m I disappointed? Pretty much, it wouldn’t hurt to have a more creative story take and having a year later as I said opens up more problems because Goku and co do have more options then broly has, something a whole year makes would make more of a problem. Also are the dragon balls strong enough to bring back galaxies lost due to the rampage inbetween? No but they have been ignored for sake of training up when instead of gambling on shortcuts as examples I mentioned above. And as said before the whole year tagline takes away any suspense, the situation is bad but it’s still controllable with Goku relying on a whole year for his plan and robs of any desperation. It could had been done better which I think is a valid critique.
Honestly, I don't understand you. You regularly comment on other comics on the site, only to decry them for free under the guise of "constructive criticism".
There's really nothing to the story (like with Yamoshi, for example) and you're shooting down the projects.
It's all the more sad that you're part of the DBM team too, but you behave like the unpleasant people you're supposed to moderate.
Yes, there are a billion solutions for dealing with Broly, as with all DB's previous threats, but in this case there's no scenaristic interest and nothing to tell.
This story is just for fun, that's all. Sad to have to remind a "moderator" of this...
You havent't read the story yet, and
Well, that's how it is, but you should know that you're just unpleasant and that turning your comments yellow doesn't change anything.
People like him will do this for things like reactions, and it causes trouble that usually ranges in the form of conflict. It's a wonder he doesn't get banned for this. They're probably the same kind of user who victim blames Son Bra or something in the mainstream story despite every false criticism about her being not only blatantly untrue but so obviously not seen in the story once you actually read it.
Just use the namekian dragon ball to bring back someone as a immortal and wish them to be Lssj. Or have Goku and vegeta have potara, wish back and then grant immortality.
the whole year later aspect opens up more problems then it should , at this point this chapter will be more about how well drawn the action is. I personally think this whole year later was a bad call.
Edit: I’m I disappointed? Pretty much, it wouldn’t hurt to have a more creative story take and having a year later as I said opens up more problems because Goku and co do have more options then broly has, something a whole year makes would make more of a problem. Also are the dragon balls strong enough to bring back galaxies lost due to the rampage inbetween? No but they have been ignored for sake of training up when instead of gambling on shortcuts as examples I mentioned above. And as said before the whole year tagline takes away any suspense, the situation is bad but it’s still controllable with Goku relying on a whole year for his plan and robs of any desperation. It could had been done better which I think is a valid critique.
Honestly, I don't understand you. You regularly comment on other comics on the site, only to decry them for free under the guise of "constructive criticism".
There's really nothing to the story (like with Yamoshi, for example) and you're shooting down the projects.
It's all the more sad that you're part of the DBM team too, but you behave like the unpleasant people you're supposed to moderate.
Yes, there are a billion solutions for dealing with Broly, as with all DB's previous threats, but in this case there's no scenaristic interest and nothing to tell.
This story is just for fun, that's all. Sad to have to remind a "moderator" of this...
You havent't read the story yet, and
Well, that's how it is, but you should know that you're just unpleasant and that turning your comments yellow doesn't change anything.
People like him will do this for things like reactions, and it causes trouble that usually ranges in the form of conflict. It's a wonder he doesn't get banned for this. They're probably the same kind of user who victim blames Son Bra or something in the mainstream story despite every false criticism about her being not only blatantly untrue but so obviously not seen in the story once you actually read it.
People like me can also reply again on this forum.
For the record I got out of my way in finding a artist not just to help with zenbuu but to help salagir work on a special, so I am committed to this project, just as I given up some work time just to reply to this.
Now I can be but critical on criticism, I always have been for years but I also been supportive of work. I was critical of goten-kun work early on but was won over because there were new ideas etc. I stand by my comments on this special so far, the only reason I’m even replying back is because someone mentioned my comment got a reaction from the author.
It’s not like DBM has been hitting ever story out of the park, the Facebook reviews and a twitter post criticising DBM are evident but I will be fair and balanced whenever I can. I more or less resigned from this and may comment on the action.
What I do take issue with is thinking I go out of my way causing trouble. If you think that click on the report feature.
Sawyzer has every right to say his side but I also have every right to respond to anyone who suggests I’m causing trouble, pointing out how the story being presented as lacking any meaningful content is fair because it is. If the creator disagrees that’s his fine but I still stand by it. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
July 15th 2024
So broly was doing nothing in the span of a year? The guy that can now one hit galaxies (or at least destroy a super black hole) just did nothing since? He defeated the strongest fusion imaginable but individual training will overcome that? I’m sure at this point good chunk of the universe is void of galaxies with the way broly is.
Just use the namekian dragon ball to bring back someone as a immortal and wish them to be Lssj. Or have Goku and vegeta have potara, wish back and then grant immortality.
the whole year later aspect opens up more problems then it should , at this point this chapter will be more about how well drawn the action is. I personally think this whole year later was a bad call.
Edit: I’m I disappointed? Pretty much, it wouldn’t hurt to have a more creative story take and having a year later as I said opens up more problems because Goku and co do have more options then broly has, something a whole year makes would make more of a problem. Also are the dragon balls strong enough to bring back galaxies lost due to the rampage inbetween? No but they have been ignored for sake of training up when instead of gambling on shortcuts as examples I mentioned above. And as said before the whole year tagline takes away any suspense, the situation is bad but it’s still controllable with Goku relying on a whole year for his plan and robs of any desperation. It could had been done better which I think is a valid critique. 3 Replie(s)
DBMultiverse Special OAV - Broly Final War page 5
Just use the namekian dragon ball to bring back someone as a immortal and wish them to be Lssj. Or have Goku and vegeta have potara, wish back and then grant immortality.
the whole year later aspect opens up more problems then it should , at this point this chapter will be more about how well drawn the action is. I personally think this whole year later was a bad call.
Edit: I’m I disappointed? Pretty much, it wouldn’t hurt to have a more creative story take and having a year later as I said opens up more problems because Goku and co do have more options then broly has, something a whole year makes would make more of a problem. Also are the dragon balls strong enough to bring back galaxies lost due to the rampage inbetween? No but they have been ignored for sake of training up when instead of gambling on shortcuts as examples I mentioned above. And as said before the whole year tagline takes away any suspense, the situation is bad but it’s still controllable with Goku relying on a whole year for his plan and robs of any desperation. It could had been done better which I think is a valid critique. 3 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
July 13th 2024
Sorry, did someone just upload an abridged version because it’s so wildly out of place that I honestly thought I was reading something else.
‘Apple looks bad so I’ll crush it or even bin it’
Person’s reaction ‘Oh you ruined everything and hope you die’ from the stall where you are selling to potential customers.
Also so we can have a slip a hint for him to investigate or take the story elsewhere.
It’s silly, you could have had her play it off or be bemused but secretly she’s angry and it’ll be more effective. 1 Replie(s)
Yamoshi Story page 11
‘Apple looks bad so I’ll crush it or even bin it’
Person’s reaction ‘Oh you ruined everything and hope you die’ from the stall where you are selling to potential customers.
Also so we can have a slip a hint for him to investigate or take the story elsewhere.
It’s silly, you could have had her play it off or be bemused but secretly she’s angry and it’ll be more effective. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
July 11th 2024
This whole year later must have a payoff because if it was just ‘assemble strong fighters’ they could had done that at anytime, yemma made exceptions for vegeta, fused kai could had talked to the namekians at anytime. Said kai could also use kai-kai to teleport broly to end of the universe and come back.
This feels very much like this is drama for sake of drama or drama without sound reasoning.
I suspect the second panel is traced as I’m having deja vu with that image.
If this whole ‘year later’ wasn’t a factor then I would say there be more a sense of desperation but because there’s already a plan in place the tension isn’t there. But I guess we’ll see how this plan unfolds.
DBMultiverse Special OAV - Broly Final War page 4
This feels very much like this is drama for sake of drama or drama without sound reasoning.
I suspect the second panel is traced as I’m having deja vu with that image.
If this whole ‘year later’ wasn’t a factor then I would say there be more a sense of desperation but because there’s already a plan in place the tension isn’t there. But I guess we’ll see how this plan unfolds.
thebritwriter
July 8th 2024
DrewSaga was saying:
"Get inside quick!"
Like that's gonna do anything with someone who can easily destroy a planet.
yaosers was saying: kkk was saying: I'm sure he could have asked to gather the dragon balls any time in the year since Broly went on his rampage... Why wait until it becomes an emergency?
I have the same question. I think the answer is... Broly's "plot armor"? And I think the solution is "suspension of disbelief"... Sweep it under the carpet, use only the intelligence needed to comprehend the story, otherwise I might not be able to have any fun, as with many things in life. **/forcedLaughter**
Or perhaps Kibito Kai is incompetent and when he shows up you know your screwed.
Like that's gonna do anything with someone who can easily destroy a planet.
yaosers was saying: kkk was saying: I'm sure he could have asked to gather the dragon balls any time in the year since Broly went on his rampage... Why wait until it becomes an emergency?
I have the same question. I think the answer is... Broly's "plot armor"? And I think the solution is "suspension of disbelief"... Sweep it under the carpet, use only the intelligence needed to comprehend the story, otherwise I might not be able to have any fun, as with many things in life. **/forcedLaughter**
Or perhaps Kibito Kai is incompetent and when he shows up you know your screwed.
At some point we can’t just blame it on the character, he did warn the protagonists in advance in GT and Z. He even saved Goku and vegeta when kid buu blew up the earth.
Unless there’s an explanation as to why, it’ll be put down as weak writing where it makes the character looks more incompetent than he actually was for sake of quick progression.
thebritwriter
July 8th 2024
The only thing I think is wrong is how he’s clearly being over charged for 1 apple. Unless 5 salads equates to pence or cents then he’s being ripped off.
I have to wonder what the issue with the apple could be aside from thinking it’s poison, maybe it’s triggering a ptsd.
Yamoshi Story page 10
I have to wonder what the issue with the apple could be aside from thinking it’s poison, maybe it’s triggering a ptsd.
thebritwriter
July 7th 2024
Dear kawaii bra
Everyone knows that ‘kawaii’ is a long dead 00’s trend. Your very move set showcases how generic, not superior, the ‘craze’ was.
It’s a relic from a bygone era of cringe.
Chibi Son Bra did her best! page 159
Everyone knows that ‘kawaii’ is a long dead 00’s trend. Your very move set showcases how generic, not superior, the ‘craze’ was.
It’s a relic from a bygone era of cringe.
thebritwriter
July 1st 2024
loopwhirlipide was saying:
When the fan manga is so good it gets fan fan manga.
Which would make it the second one, though heard someone else could be making their own Dbm based story also. 1 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
June 27th 2024
True no one is twisting our arms but the comment section is open to all thoughts and views (within reason of course) and who knows ‘maybe’ it be good but I am skeptical that be the case. The idea of it isn’t interesting by itself, as someone mentioned it is just a longer rehash of what Rogeru did.
At worst it could just be a cathartic slideshow of ‘oh look we tried, and now we die’
Now there are some specials in work with regards to broly so there’s more of him to come but I believe those artists can do something different and maybe we’ll see that, and some people are convinced along the way but I think it’s understandable the premise of this is questioned, when it’s been done before.
News v2, id 10
At worst it could just be a cathartic slideshow of ‘oh look we tried, and now we die’
Now there are some specials in work with regards to broly so there’s more of him to come but I believe those artists can do something different and maybe we’ll see that, and some people are convinced along the way but I think it’s understandable the premise of this is questioned, when it’s been done before.
thebritwriter
June 26th 2024
Sayazur was saying:
Just to be clear :
This story is just for the fun, it's a big mac. Take it as a bonus
This story is just for the fun, it's a big mac. Take it as a bonus
Or as a curse.
thebritwriter
June 16th 2024
[quote from="DrewSaga" id=282566
I agree, but I don't see Roshi being able to outrun Cyborgs who are stronger than Frieza. Nor is it an option for Roshi to even be able to beat them in any way (his best shot would be the Mafuba but there are two Cyborgs and he would die using it only once). Roshi is barely any better here than any regular person the Cyborgs have gleefully slaughtered as far as his situation goes. Which means that he signed his death warrant the moment he came face to face with #17 but he knew that Gohan (and Trunks perhaps) was the best chance left at saving the Earth thus he threw his life to buy time.[/quote]
It’s more the attempt to want to live I wanted to see, it’s one thing to sacrifice yourself for a cause but can you be certain the cause will carry on afterwards? I like to think Rhoshi would try to survive, use a afterimage and then hide his ki in bid to get out for example. it would fail but he still bought time to save others and it can be this attempt that challenges Gohan’s nihilistic thought process, that even trying achieves something.
And I don’t think Rhoshi would take Gohan’s sudden realisation as a lasting change to his mentality and leaving fate of earth to a young teen seems irresponsible so I imagine he would try to use all his wits to at least try.
It’s not entirely impossible, future Gohan in trunks special manage to hide from the androids in the festival (they couldn’t locate his ki) though that led them to spamming the place with ki blasts.
DB Multiverse page 2353
I agree, but I don't see Roshi being able to outrun Cyborgs who are stronger than Frieza. Nor is it an option for Roshi to even be able to beat them in any way (his best shot would be the Mafuba but there are two Cyborgs and he would die using it only once). Roshi is barely any better here than any regular person the Cyborgs have gleefully slaughtered as far as his situation goes. Which means that he signed his death warrant the moment he came face to face with #17 but he knew that Gohan (and Trunks perhaps) was the best chance left at saving the Earth thus he threw his life to buy time.[/quote]
It’s more the attempt to want to live I wanted to see, it’s one thing to sacrifice yourself for a cause but can you be certain the cause will carry on afterwards? I like to think Rhoshi would try to survive, use a afterimage and then hide his ki in bid to get out for example. it would fail but he still bought time to save others and it can be this attempt that challenges Gohan’s nihilistic thought process, that even trying achieves something.
And I don’t think Rhoshi would take Gohan’s sudden realisation as a lasting change to his mentality and leaving fate of earth to a young teen seems irresponsible so I imagine he would try to use all his wits to at least try.
It’s not entirely impossible, future Gohan in trunks special manage to hide from the androids in the festival (they couldn’t locate his ki) though that led them to spamming the place with ki blasts.
thebritwriter
June 16th 2024
Dosent take much for saiyan’s to be emotionally triggered these days.
Yamoshi Story page 7
thebritwriter
June 16th 2024
DrewSaga was saying:
#17 didn't seem nearly as upset as I thought he'd be about losing.
I think he should have had a plan B, if he knew 17 would kill him if he had won, despite promising (and that was the most likely outcome) then any sense of the cyborg upholding his own word is meaningless. A killer with no regard to life isn’t going to respect the wishes of the dead, not when that said killer has just killed the man he made a deal with.
I feel like 17 would destroy the city out of spite or be ‘clever’ and get 18 to do it instead so as in his mind is not breaking his word.
Rhoshi’s sacrifice isn’t wise so to speak when earth’s only hope is a teen who thinks it’s better of to die and a kid trunks who has no training or even a decent power level.
Personally I think Rhoshi’s plan should have had a part of trying to escape afterwards, it’ll fail because he knows Gohan and Trunks just aren’t ready in this scenario but it would show he knows the two aren’t ready and will try to fight on and live all the same. 2 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
June 14th 2024
Damian Qualshy was saying:
thebritwriter was saying:
I think the same guy also made a Future Gohan coming to the past instead of Trunks, and he with present Goku fight Final Form Cold. Great art, don't remember seeing it translated to English.
In any case I still hope for this Yamoshi series to start laying some more lore dumps and slowly progressing the story instead of skipping dialogue.
I think the same guy also made a Future Gohan coming to the past instead of Trunks, and he with present Goku fight Final Form Cold. Great art, don't remember seeing it translated to English.
In any case I still hope for this Yamoshi series to start laying some more lore dumps and slowly progressing the story instead of skipping dialogue.
I vaugely recall some of that but never have been able to find the images since, as if it was never there at all *dundundun!* Or those links I recall seeing it were hit by copyright which is a lot more likely.
@Break away.
Writing is a learning curve, and some people see it harder then drawing, not only are you dealing with lack of space, and making it seem 'natural' but finding a writer to help only to see them dictate how the story should go, effectively hijacking (which happened to me before and decided I do my own projects myself)
Now with the six page criticsim, I believe it's valid (by what I mentioned on discord) as an example if I'm going to have a character say 'I'm tired and it's been a long day' I would have it shown in pages prior that he isn't getting best of the day. Be it labor etc. When the page just has a few dialouge and the main character flies to a new location that does make it a little empty. Anyway we'll see how page 7 fares.
thebritwriter
June 9th 2024
Teleported_Bread was saying:
Damian Qualshy was saying: Not off to a good start, but there's still hoping.
Actually this story is a little older, I think. It was written some years ago. Unless this is a revamp I'm unfamiliar with. On a related note, I hope the DBM team gets permission to post Dragon Ball Kakumei pages on here. I'd read the hell out of it. I doubt I can put in a request, though...
Actually this story is a little older, I think. It was written some years ago. Unless this is a revamp I'm unfamiliar with. On a related note, I hope the DBM team gets permission to post Dragon Ball Kakumei pages on here. I'd read the hell out of it. I doubt I can put in a request, though...
I believe they tried but kakumei said no flat out, that said I think they’ve hit but if a stumbling block with more rushed chapters in order to sell them. They have a ‘for profit’ goal which runs against them setting up if they wanted to.
To be fair I tried recruiting other artists into this; creators of DB bloodlines, Gine reboot, New Age and Hakai.
The only one closest to joining was gine reboot but the creator has their content too tied with patreon, Hakai was kinda close and trying to see it be a DBM exclusive but didn’t pan out. 2 Replie(s)
thebritwriter
June 9th 2024
This has been a rough start, and while it’s been done a while ago it’s still tedious, slow paced to point where anything interesting isn’t happening.
And much like sawyer’s bardock tales (that did one or two moments) the background and general art is, dull.
This has been far to slow paced and for a story about the saiyans you expect there be more lore and material utilised beyond ‘hi uncle’ ‘bye uncle’
It can be binge read at a later date but as a page per page it’s underwhelming.
Yamoshi Story page 6
And much like sawyer’s bardock tales (that did one or two moments) the background and general art is, dull.
This has been far to slow paced and for a story about the saiyans you expect there be more lore and material utilised beyond ‘hi uncle’ ‘bye uncle’
It can be binge read at a later date but as a page per page it’s underwhelming.
thebritwriter
March 20th 2024
I’m a bit mixed on this.
Firstly the coloring team has done a good job in co-ordinating new segments, though at the same time it did drag and while I can understand why it was felt to drag the fight out including to get a more tragic outcome, it doesn’t address the fault why (Gohan of all people) no one told pan to forefit or try to achieve ssj2. Bojack though all his blandness is still a powerful character and without an attempt from the u16 group to try and do something (including encouraging of her to yell forefit) makes this feel a bit forced. Yes pan died but the longer the fight drew out, the more chances her or Gohan/videl could try and say ‘your not going to win pan’
I feel like that was needed for this.
DBMultiverse Colors page 146
Firstly the coloring team has done a good job in co-ordinating new segments, though at the same time it did drag and while I can understand why it was felt to drag the fight out including to get a more tragic outcome, it doesn’t address the fault why (Gohan of all people) no one told pan to forefit or try to achieve ssj2. Bojack though all his blandness is still a powerful character and without an attempt from the u16 group to try and do something (including encouraging of her to yell forefit) makes this feel a bit forced. Yes pan died but the longer the fight drew out, the more chances her or Gohan/videl could try and say ‘your not going to win pan’
I feel like that was needed for this.
thebritwriter
March 20th 2024
Lot of good tribute art, and I had to decline contributing at the time because well, it don’t have the time to contribute.
I have to admit I’m not as much shocked into Toriyama’s passing, more stunned and still I’m, processing he’s gone and it’s going to be different even if Toroyto keeps it faithful, it won’t be identical.
I’ll certinely post my contribution though it’ll just be in the comment section.
Webpage dbm_page_2312.html
I have to admit I’m not as much shocked into Toriyama’s passing, more stunned and still I’m, processing he’s gone and it’s going to be different even if Toroyto keeps it faithful, it won’t be identical.
I’ll certinely post my contribution though it’ll just be in the comment section.
thebritwriter
March 5th 2024
I think the fight has been while and intensity of the bout is still there although I’m a bit surprised on the number of pages added. I assume there be maybe a page of action followed by pan freaking out at bojack’s power and trying to yell forefit only for bojack to choke her from saying it.
DBMultiverse Colors page 138
Language
This looks like a solid start but I’m guessing this will equate to a ‘is that all’ from black.
I mean, it's just for suspense. Showcase the surroundings in complete silence.
The suspense was a key aim that I liked, I think the author wanted to add bit of toriyama (the dragon) in the mix I’m not saying it’s a bad thing just unexpected with pages previously showing a somewhat grounded setting, then there’s a dragon flying by during the standoff. It does add a reminder that this world still has its ‘fantasy’ from the original dragon ball days. 1 Replie(s)